MY SECRET PLACE
There's a magical place that I often visit,
where all of my dreams and wishes come true.
A special place where I can be myself,
where happiness always seems to follow through.
In this place are creatures that roam,
so beautiful, magnificent, and free.
Just like us they have open hearts,
and a special language that they speak.
The forests here are so alive,
plentiful are the fruits that they bare.
Nothing but peace and harmony dwells within,
and tranquility floats in and around the air.
There is no sun or moon,
the temperature is always just right.
You can sleep all day and never have to worry,
about having to leave here at night.
Patience is a way of life here,
no one rushes to get to where they want to be.
People hold their heads up high and smile,
they're always proud to have you in their company.
You can find all of the solitude that you seek,
love and peace are so ominous here.
Every one respects and supports one another,
and their trust and loyalty will never disappear.
In tiny little caves live the most beautiful elves,
many with families of their very own.
Each one is unique with his or her own colors,
always seeking friends, never wanting to be alone.
The elves come out and frolic in the forests,
while unicorns roam and graze in the grassy fields.
With their powerful and majestic wings,
they bring a feeling of strength and security.
Fairies fly free throughout,
their fluttering wings sparkling bright.
Lighting up this magical universe,
like thousands of lanterns dancing in the night.
Stars decorate the clear night sky,
blazing afar, wanting to be seen.
They bring hope and encouragement to one and all,
creating a wonderful and tranquil scene.
The unicorns are so delicate yet strong,
their awesome presence will captivate you instantly.
Enchanting the hearts of all who come across them,
nothing can ever stand up to their uniqueness and beauty.
This is a place that I turn to,
whenever I am down and blue.
A wonderful and exciting trip,
that I would recommend for everyone, even you.
Friends, please take my hand and join me,
let us fly away into the sky.
Where miracles happen every day,
so that you don't have to wish or cry.
You will love this enchanted place,
my special and wonderful escape from time.
It helps me to forget about my problems and sorrows,
Even though it only exists in the back of my mind.
Author notes
This is my favorite Gold Tropy Winning poem because of the fact that it envelopes me, and takes me away to this magical and secret place every time I read it.
I love the tranquility and freeness of it.
Thank you for the inspiration and for holding this contest!
In a list
A contest entry
- Please Take Me Away From It All by tawk.
425 points, ended February 25, 2007, 24 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - options LOTS OF EM by ForgottenMemories.
600 points, ended March 18, 2007, 17 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Round One: Prewrites Only by katiethepirate.
330 points, ended July 23, 2007, 27 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Show me your best! by genevieve3.
600 points, ended February 17, 56 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Thank you for taking the time to read and comment on this piece. I appreciate it!
Comments
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Wonderful!
Isn't it great to fly into the imagination and
have peace and a loving heart~
Wouldn't it be a wonderful world in reality?
You capture bliss with you words...
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Beautiful fantasy
A lovely place to live. On this rainy day I think I'll borrow it if thats okay with you. lol God Bless Congratulation on the Gold -
Sweet :)
Whats a lovely poem.... so pure and beautiful.... nicely done
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Excellent
Firstly, let me congratulate you on your Gold Trophy win.
Secondly, let me congratulate you on your Bronze Trophy win.
Thirdly, let me congratulate you on your Honourable Trophy win.
All three, are so well deserved.
This is such a wonderfully penned piece of poetry.
I enjoy reading poetry so beautifully penned.
Anything that has to do with Unicorns and Fairies, always tend to get me going.
Well done.
Keep up with the great work.
Keep on penning.
Thank you so very much for sharing your wonderful talent with all of us here.
Truly appreciated on my end.
*S* Cynthia
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WOW, beautiful :-] One of the best poems I have read on this site. Truely beautiful. You wrote it so well, and it has loads of emotion, and a perfect flaw.
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I too wish to jurney there. Thank you sp much, its a magical world of words!
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this is beautiful. I want to go to this place too. I loved the imagery that was through out this poem, you did an excellant job on penning this piece.
kathy
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Wow. Sounds magical indeed. It made me think of a miniture vacation to another realm. Beautifully written. Congratulations on your trophies for this. They are much deserved.
Write on.
~*~SP~*~
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wonderful release of words
I like your poem because it takes me on a peaceful and beautiful journey. It is tranquil and soothing in its emotion and it is like a therapy just to tread it. Like the rhyme, like the rhythm. Well done.
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I can see why this won gold! This is a beautiful poem about an amazingly tranquil and magical place. Sounds like a place I would love living in!
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we all need a happy place to visit. I see why this one has trophies. My happy place is my tub filled with scented oil and nothing but the flickering light of candles ... oh yes, and "for the first time" by Rod Stewart playing ... yes indeedy that is my happy place!
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everyone needs that place in mind. very valid write. thank you for your entry. dusty
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I am without words.....
I think all of us should have such a special place in the back of our minds. Whenever I am down, I too, will travel to my own "secret place." Very well done with the imagery and the rhyme, Jeremy! This piece flowed so naturally. I can see why this is your favorite gold trophy winner. It's well-deserved, indeed!
Knight70
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wow, just checked out ur page...nice.
this poem jumped out at me and now i see why...I love mysticism, magick, unicorns and fantasy life. greatly penned here and i have a similar world in my head as well. -
to much for me to even say as everyone stated below this poem is fabolous and fantastic i am new and in the ladies essence gropu checking out the opposite sex
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I lovelovelovelovelovelove the imagery! :]
I wanna keep reading it so I can keep going there,
it's nice there.
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The poem takes the reader on a magical journey and it made me imagine all those beautiful things that I'd otherwise not think about. Thanks a lot for sharing this lovely poem
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Hello there Poojarathnakumar! Thank you so much for taking the time to read and comment on this one. I appreciate it and am glad that you enjoyed it!
Jeremy0826
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Beautiful imagery! I wish I could go to that place! I really love this one!
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Wow such a great imagination. I love this one. I wish I could do something like that. This is a wonderful write. I enjoyed the read. Keep it up. Great imagination. I loved it!!!
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I really feel like going to your secret place after reading this!!!
Beautiful poem! Absolutely fantastic imagery.
However it was missing a little bit of originality.
Thank you for entering this was lovely!
Maria -
This was a really good flow.
great job
godd luck in the contests
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Very nice poem here, I like this. The flow is off in some places, but other than that this was enjoyable to read.
I don't think this will win, so I'm going to remove this from the contest. [I have 100 entries.. it's easier to stay organized by doing this] Thanks for entering though.
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This is amazing! I didn't want to stop reading it. This brought me to a whole new place. Thanks so much for entering and good luck!
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Great write Thank you for entering
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I lik ehtis alot and it deserved its trophies
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This is a second read for me and it still soothes me. Wonderfully written and described. Congratulations on the wins, this is very deserving. Well done!
Jeannie
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VERY GOOD! This is a beautiful poem! It lets me see you and your views a bit! MAGNIFICENT! Good luck in my contest!
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A delightful place of enchantment!
You will love this enchanted place,
my special and wonderful escape from time.
It helps me to forget about my problems and sorrows,
Even though it only exists in the back of my mind.
Even in the mind, it is real, through your words.
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Great poem
This poem is very good, you wrote it so well and i want to live in your world! lol One of my favorite parts is:
"In this place are creatures that roam,
so beautiful, magnificent, and free.
Just like us they have open hearts,
and a special language that they speak."
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sounds like a nice little place. i think i'd like to visit. very well penned and i liked your word choice. good job and good luck.
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Wow, superb rhyming and flow. Really loved this... it was magical indeed. Thanks for entering prewrites, best wishes.
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wow this is great. a truly good fantasy poem, i enjoyed reading it. your imagery was great, i could see you fantasy world very clearly. well written. good luck in my contest xxShadowEaterxx
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Nice job.
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Breathless....
I can certainly see why you won Gold for this absolute masterpiece... there is a plethora of imagery to take me away from it all and delivery me to the Utopia you speak of
PERFECTLY PENNED
XOXO
Heidi
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Congratulations
It makes me wonder why many of us didn't get to live this kind of life in the first place. Never having to worry about dying or having to suffer any pain. Just before reading this, I wrote a similar poem, but not quite so fantasy-like.
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Oh my ..
Grab my hand and take me, im ready to go with you there, lests grab up our fellow friends and run free. This was well written, very descriptive and a great picture you painted. love you darling.
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I need to go there immediately! This is the most incredible write that I have seen in a while. You have really painted a place that I wish did exist. Great write. Good luck in the contest.
Jeannie
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" Friends, please take my hand and join me,
let us fly away into the sky.
Where miracles happen every day,
so that you don't have to wish or cry.
You will love this enchanted place,
my special and wonderful escape from time.
It helps me to forget about my problems and sorrows,
Even though it only exists in the back of my mind ".
Please take me with you, LoL
This sounds so peaceful and lovely.
I wish there really was such a place.
I would be the first one there, and I would never leave.
Jeremy this really was such a joy to read,
it made the reeader feel as if they took a trip from their everyday worried, if only for awhile.
I really needed to read this piece, it made me feel so much better. Outstanding job ~~~
Manyblessings2u & yours
Joyce
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this is great i would keep up the good work if i were you... good luck ( come see some of my poems if you get a minute)
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beautiful images to wander through.
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YOU HAVE OUTSHUN YOURSELVE, AGAIN!
Friends, please take my hand and join me,
let us fly away into the sky.
Where miracles happen every day,
so that you don't have to wish or cry.
You will love this enchanted place,
my special and wonderful escape from time.
It helps me to forget about my problems and sorrows,
Even though it only exists in the back of my mind.
A wonderful contest entry and a beautiful piece all on it's own, my friend - BUT knowing you - I am sure that you got the last line just a wee bit wrong as it is plain for me to see that this SPECIAL PLACE in not only in the back of you mind BUT living in your heart and soul, also - as NIRVANA ISLAND exists deep inside of me (in reality), too! GOOD LUCK in the contest, Brother and Thanks SO MUCH for featuring this magical and mystical piece for otherwise I would have sadly missed it.
Love & Peace!
Earl.
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Beautiful
All through the poem I had one song stuck in my head: My Dream by DHT. It talkes about a place with no war and only peace, and out of all this I only have one thing to add: "Take me to my dream, love is everything [...] In a dream that must come true."
(W) S.B (W)
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gorges pic
you sure can write thats beautiful and free
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Back to childhood in this one. Sweet.
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What a beautiful, serene place...Can I get a couple of tickets?? This was so wonderfully done and just made me want to fly..it had such a mystery and fantasy effect to it. Absolutely loved it.
Great job. Good luck in the contest
Soulful Woman
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lovely
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This is so what I was looking for! This is amazing and I loved reading it so much. It brought tears to my eyes. Excellent flow and content. Good luck in my contest
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