Long forgotten
The outside world
The world beyond these four walls
Is a distant memory
Of the person I once was
Here I sit
With my thoughts
Waiting
For my chance of freedom
To escape this cold, damp, prison
Morning rays
Comforted by the warmth and the light
That little ray of sunshine
Shining through my window
Giving me hope
Courage
To live another day
To not give up
Although I feel lifeless
I will bide my time
Author notes
Picture No.2
A contest entry
- Picture Inspiration........... by Lyre-Bird-.
530 points, ended March 9, 2007, 23 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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A little ray of sunshine, can be an amazing uplift to a sorrowed heart.
An amazing poem. Kind of dark, but with hope there too...
Excellent..
Jeffro -
Thank you for entering the contest!!!!!!
Hope you have enjoyed the contest as much as we have enjoyed reading your entry
Best of Luck
Tracey -
This is one of the types of poems that prove that poems don't HAVE to rhyme to be good... or great.
I especially enjoyed the way you started each stanza, and the end of them. For some reason.. I was able to read those with a more bold feeling. .and it definately worked for me.
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Sis,
Great and very sad piece...It was very touching and I could feel the myriad of emotions eminating form the page. Definitely seemed as though it was written from the heart.
But there is hope, a little ray of sunshine to find unopened the close doors to find our way out of the dark.... There is more opportunities waiting for us, we don't need to be prisoner in our past..we must to step forward...One more thing Tomorrow is another day for us, a brand new day from the East and to witness the suns smiling...a lifeline awaits us!!!
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what a beautiful comment, thank you
Yes, there is a hint of truth in there. I kinda felt the skeletons pain but there is always hope. The sun will come out tomorrow, always room for a fresh start.
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This is lovely. Your words do complement the picture well. Your thoughts and feelings are expressed in a very relatable way. Well done. Good luck in the contest.
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Thank you for your kind comments and applause. They are much appreciated
Will be back to read some of your poetry tomorrow.
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Beautifully penned and a wonderful interpretation of the picture.
'Courage
To live another day
To not give up
Although I feel lifeless
I will bide my time'
A very strong ending! Well done indeed!
My best to you in this contest
Gaylene
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Thanks Gaylene!! Your comments are always much appreciated.
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Nice write! Well written emotion detailing the sincerity of thought. Complementing the picture chosen. Thank you for entering!
Wendy
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Thanks for the lovely comment and the applause, much appreciated Renee
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