Silver patterns
on supple arms
test frosted water
- timid.
Hands part - to bare
healing carnelian.
And jewels melt
as radiant tickles
stroke the bud
to wake.
Author notes
Not sure it's finished. May add more as it comes.
In a list
Please tell me what you think
Comments
1 - 5 of 5
-
I'm pretty much convinced this poem is actually finished
a snippet alright, but with a great impact and lovely images
-
!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!genuine!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
now this is the very poetry i truly cherish the very most!!! i love the simplicity you have loved into this and the way you take the reader in the palm of your hand and mold them is an incredible experience to put it humbly and ever so mildly!!!!
-
Beautiful
what you have is lovely, and i love the line(s) "Hands part-to bare healing carnelian." Your poem seems cryptic, and yet I'm able to feel serenity from what you've got, but it seems incomplete.
-
Wonderful
i love this nature poem very good,i do think you should add more too the poem like you said it seems a little incomplete to me.but the part of it that i can see now is a ture set of nature,you could have been a little bit more discriptive about it but scence its such a small poem it fits well.if you make it bigger i think you should be a little bit more discriptive.besides that it was a well write,wonderful poem of nature
maddie
-
Beautifully lovely
and rather cryptic. The imagery is vivid and well conjured, and led me to a couple of interpretations, but I'm still a little mystified.
Brilliant poem.
Adding your comment:
1 - 5 of 5
