I really thought you changed,
And that you really cared.
But it turns out you were just alone,
desperate ,and scared.
I thought you were reaaly trying,
And that you almost made it there,
But it turns out you were lying,
And I really dont think its fair,
That you can be so happy,
When everyone is suffering,
And constantly crying.
Falling deeper,and deeper
into their darkening holes,
Thats you seem to be
pleasently, patiently digging.
Please tell me what you think
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This is quite a short, yet deep and meaningful poem that you have written here... I like the emotions and anger you've wielded inside your words...
I have found a few oopsies though:
line 5: reaaly --> realy
line 8: dont --> don't
line 8: its --> it's
Overal,l this is a well written piece! -
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practice wut u preach
I found an oopsy! realy- REALLY! no jus joking i didnt even notice it - my dad did!lol
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