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smokey rum

cigarette in hand
Rum dribbling down my chin, Breath
is overrated

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  • Polaja Greeters member
    March 8, 2007

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    This is a very interesting Haiku ... you have the form perfectly and the content is powerful.

    Good Luck

    Polly

  • Cinnarry gold member
    February 25, 2007
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    good job!

  • Cinnarry gold member
    February 24, 2007
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    very clever..I like it!