Collapsed,
Fallen,
Broken,
Surrender.
Anxiety,
Guilt,
Suffer,
Forever.
Ignorant,
Innocent.
Changed,
Same.
Lost,
Memories,
Questions,
Pain.
Answers
Evading.
Growing
Insane.
Blinding
Darkness,
Dearly
Departed.
Ending,
Beginning,
Forgetting,
Unstarted.
A contest entry
- Something out of the ordinary... by lucy sky-diamond.
600 points, ended March 11, 2007, 27 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Con. crit.? How'd I do?
Comments
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this i really great, you have pulled off the rhyming very well, and produced a well structured poem. however, beacuse almost every word was two sylabbles (however u spell that), when you used words with only one it kind of upset the flow. but by making a few minor ammendments, im sure you could have a potential masterpiece on your hands
thank you very much for entering, and good luck
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