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The Way My Love Works

To leave me here laying and weak
is maybe the exact thing that I need
to shake me violently out of this daze
my thoughts of you never wandering astray
with my aching heart I still follow you home
even if you leave me sitting out in the cold
for even when you turn me down
you'll never see me make a frown
because at least I know you care enough
to tell me that I'm not good enough
but if you say you love me
and turn the other way
I'll hurt for a while
but it doesn't mean I'll stay
I'll move one

you can count on that

and don't wait on me

to walk right back

into your arms when you finally see

that my love for you was more than a plee

I promise you won't hurt

and much as you hurt me

because it would be your fault

and then you could see

my pain inside

the tears I cried

but no sympathy, thanks

I'll be just fine.

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  • x Gemini x
    March 1, 2007
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    First, let me thank you for entering my contest.

    Second:

    The imagery was very well done. Creative perspective and conveyance. Easily related to.

    I PERSONALLY like to see punctuation though.

    Suggestion: Insert spaces, so as not to OVERHELM the reader.

    Well done


  • Dreams27
    February 24, 2007
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    a nice write, take care, sam(dreams27) xx