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Stand tall

A new red sky is rising
over proud moments  
of meanings that last.
Stand tall all my memories,
stay on Earths old land,
carved Totoms of my Kin.

Gentle breezes murmmur down stream.
Rabbits, coons and birds
listen
to the tall grass sway.
Totom poetry speaks.

Sweet, carved cedarwood
scents all curved thoughts
that fly toward my fingers eye.
Bear awakens to bring the honey
as the Eagle dips
down from the sky.
The night Wolf howl stops
when elk hoofs move away.

My people, all life,
hear my prayer.
I, as one beside you

with my breath

may I please Thee.

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  • minto
    September 18, 2007
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    ah, and this gives me a breath of fresh air itself. Nice way of breaking concepts...its brought more universal in the middle and spreads back to you at both ends..i do believe breathe in the second to last line should be breath, but I could be wrong. I feel better to be in company of your Totems.


  • Jessica Lyndsay
    July 30, 2007
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    I love this write keep up the good work!!! Jess


  • ibsons hysops
    May 31, 2007
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    your poetry here is so beautiful!


  • Musimwa
    May 9, 2007
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    very good Annie, i loved this one. Good day

  • rosebud
    March 29, 2007
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    excellent

    i loved the nature "air' in this piece... lovely write, keep up the great work...


  • pattyann4500
    February 24, 2007
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    Beautifully written, Annie. You don't write often, but you do write quality. Love, Patricia


  • katina
    February 24, 2007
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    Your descriptions in this poem are so vivid. Nature has come alive in this poem, and as a human connected with the animals and the nature, a peaceful yet harmonic melody of life.

    The specific details you have used in this piece really make this poem stand out.

    Great write!


  • Debbie Hansman
    February 24, 2007
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    I really like this....nice writing!

    debbie


  • CarolDesjarlais silver member
    February 23, 2007
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    another incredible write in a contest that has simply the bet of allpoetry in it. There are a few typos in this poem that a quick run through a word document woudl fix...but it has real integrity! well done.

    • annie
      February 24, 2007
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      I must re-write

      Thank you for your kind words. I must re-write; this poem is not yet written. I do not think it is ready, the flow is still in my head not on the page. The typos cannot be corrected in a poem that is not yet a poem. I will find my muse again and set it back to work. I wrote only words, not poetry. Please allow me to not be considered in a contest as this is not worthy now. I learn from you and this is what I seek. Blessings to you, Annie I have not been on as my machine decided to get sick and die. I am not sure why so many Trogan Horses have taken an interest in me but I have vanished without my choosing. I am on for a moment and hope to find ways of finding my site . My eyes are dulled without you God bless and keep you all

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