Relic Cradled by Scorched Stilleto Hands
Writhed like Feasting Ivy upon Mausoleums
A House Forsaken of Afflicted Phantoms
Fear Flickered in the Caliginous Moonlight
Charnel Threshold Unveiled Through Silver Ribbon
Fear Purged upon Passage to these Decadent Halls
Roving Among the Catacombs of Forgotten Solace
Labyrinth of Lamented Remedy and Respite
Wraiths Fray in Agony upon my Carnal Trepass
Reminiscent of Plagues Nefarious of Sweet Nurses
Gruesome How Wicked Smiles of Syringe Offer Redemption
Splay of Vindictive Ghouls in Corridors of Crucifixion
Banshees Swayed in Shadow Ever Wailing for Their Sins
Souls Black of Vein Seeking Solace to Their Mortality
Cadaverous to Dust Within a Somber Palace of Purity
Necropolis Belonged of Compassion in a Razor's Eye
By Healing Hands They Became Sojourned Creatures of Fate
Hands Now Vexed of Bone in Absence of God's Touch
I May Only Grasp Breath Yet Know it is Divine
Author notes
Yeah I know it's out there.It might not be what you're lookin for but it's got a atmosphere about it
A contest entry
- Horror Hospital by Amera.
1000 points, ended February 24, 2007, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Romeo and Juliet style by ilove that70s show.
300 points, ended April 2, 2007, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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very dark and creepy .. well done n good luck to you in the contest ... xXx cheeky XxX
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Your imagery is simply amazing throughout the entire poem. Your word choice is also good. Strong words help make a poem memorable.
Good job -
Whoa.
So ya...the chances of me ever being able to write something like this are nonexsistant, and that is only one reason I am so impressed. It is not an easy thing to do, in my opinion to write this was and still make sense, but you did. This didn't read like a muddles confused rambling of words put together aimlessly.
Nice Job!!!
Creepy and yes even horrific, it feels as if it is written in a book of prophesy.
Best wishes and good luck
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well done for its purposes
gruesome gory alliterate and in some ways remarkable for the vivid quality of the images...
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Wow! The key to dark poetry is in the descriptive adjectives… nasty, creepy ones. Well I think you got them all. Image is great, flow is good. This is a keeper. Good luck in the contest.
Amera
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Truly is atmospheric of haunted corridors and spirits of unclean and the undead, not ready or willing to leave. I liked it.
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