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The darkness beyond

Staring at my hands  
Tainted with my sin
Glaring at the stone
The grave you lie in

Reliving the moment
Hearing the scream
Your demented hand
Destroying my scheme

Your hollow cheeks
And deathly Glare
Hold me in a trance
Just like your affair

A vivid dream
Of me and you
Broken, torn
And withered too

Whispers in the wind
Your fractured skull
Worthless as your heart
Blackened in a world so dull

 

Glistened with tears

Wilted flowers at your grave

I sit and scream

Me, noone will ever save. 

 

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  • Never Fall in Love
    April 10, 2007

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    This is a good write, thought according to me, I think you could have added more.
    You put the words together, but there isn't much of a message behind
    Thank you for entering my contest
    Good Luck

    NeveR ♥


  • captaincrazy
    February 24, 2007

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    wow. this is AMAZING!!! i absolutely loved it. most deffinately one of your best. good luck in the contest. a peice like this deserves a trophy. =]


  • music angel 6
    February 23, 2007
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    Wow, very descriptive and powerful. I liked it, well done.


  • fungshuay24
    February 23, 2007
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    this is a really descriptive poem sis. you did a great job. i am so proud of you, good luck!!!