Child never cries
A family morn’s
A day never lived
As days went on his survival
Became less and less
She lied
But he died
She said he would be fine
His life cycle played in reveres
Death before birth
Who ever heard of such? Hurt...
He was placed in the smallest
White box you could ever see
The family cries
Not knowing why he is gone
Why he died so young
The pain will forever be felt
In the hearts of the
Dead one’s love one’s
Dedicated to Cody
A contest entry
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Awww! I love babies! I've never actually experienced a lost like that one, but I can imagine the pain and toture of the loved one's family... ESPECIALLY THE MOTHER! This was great!
Ashley
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this was a great write and i really enjoyed reading this..your words were powerful and emotional and flwoed really well keep writting your talented and good luck in the contest
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i liked it, emotional and well written, i think it needs a bit more work but it is a great poem, thank you for entering and good luck
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wow this is such a heartfelt write. you really have expressed so much emotion and depth in this piece, it is overwhelming. deeply sadning, yet it also makes me angry in a way, as I do not understand why such terrible things happen to such innocent souls.
beautifull write.
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I could really feel your pain, I guess bad things happen to us all and we never ever know why, it tears us up inside and its something that you can never forget.
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(reveres) small typo this is amazingly expressed and told i too have lost a small family member and yes it is something that we will never forget the memories only get less painful..well done and good luck in my contest
laura xx
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sorry about the typo i am not very good a getting them all thank you for the comment
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hey no worries we all make mistakes lol my common one is ahve lol xxxxx
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