Inside You're Dead
I'm Bleeding Too
Breathing Anesthesia
Killing Loneliness With You
Intravenously Raped
Your Love Contorted Mine
Every Word You Spoke
Lies Sewn Into My Spine
Pulling The Strings Of Apathy
Rusted From Desire
My Heart Cries For Amnesty
As This Mortal Shell Begins To Seize
Laying Paralyzed And Intoxicated
On Your Medicated Disease
Author notes
a·nath·e·ma /əˈnęθəmə/
1.a person or thing detested or loathed
2.a person or thing accursed or consigned to damnation or destruction.
3.a formal ecclesiastical curse involving excommunication.
4.any imprecation of divine punishment.
5.a curse; execration.
A contest entry
- Sadistic Emotions by Never Fall in Love.
650 points, ended April 11, 2007, 76 entries
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Honorable mention
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This was a very good piece. THere is a lot of power in your words. I also liked your autors notes. (nice touch!) There is a lot I could say about this poem but I'll leave it at a simple well done!
I can see why this won an honorable trophy.
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Ok then. i loved this and i think that this one will be moved into the finals. its a good write and i enjoyed reading it.
keep up the good work, and good luck.
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The flow here is just perfect, the ending is amazing... I'm not sure if this belongs as a finalist or not. Darn talented poets, confusing me
I shall let my consultant decide
Great work,
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Haunting
This just makes my stomach ache with desire to be as drunk as i can be. knowing i will be sicker than living death and still not ever caring.
-cheers
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Nicely Done!
The beat was awesome, and fit so nicely; the words were well chosen and used in a correct manner- you know how many people use big words when they don't even know what they mean -____-
Anyway, I love it!
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Great !
I like how you include words and phrases that bring to mind disturbing aspects of medicine, and that are reminiscent of hospital fears.
It has a good flow to it, and a nice ending.
Nice work (=
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good goddamn, man!
I feel priveliged to have been permitted to read that!
I love the line "killing loneliness with you"
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Simply beautiful
I don't really know what to say other than I really like this piece.
good job
luvvs
xxXxx
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I like how you capitalized every word. It's a harsh touch for the poem which adds to the feelings. I likek the line "Lies sewn into my spine."
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The relationship seems to be more related to drug use than anything. It's a very short piece, and the only feeling I get from this is desperation. It's like you're a slave to your own body.
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You definately take advantage of your extended vocabulary with this piece. It was powerful and had an excellent flow. Great use of rhyme without seeming forced. Well done.
My favorite lines were "Every Word You Spoke
Lies Sewn Into My Spine" I liked the concept of that.
Thanks so much for your comment on my poem.
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this is really good. a lot of capitalization lol, but still a wonderful write. spoke true darkness in every word. many kudos sweetie!
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"Every Word You Spoke
Lies Sewn Into My Spine
Pulling The Strings Of Apathy
Rusted From Desire"
GREAT job
I really liked this peice
mostly because I can relate to it a lot
as Manic said, stanzas would make it stronger
so that poets know exactly how to read it
perhaps if u add punctuation
you'll have it flowing in a rhythem
you can leave it like this if you wish
but when we know where to pause, where to stop, where to go on, where to whatever, it gives a lot of effect to the poem
a really good write
keep it up
Good Luck in our contest
NeveR ♥
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Great poem. The vocabulary used in this was brilliant, and worked well with your piece. I especially liked the ending. It flowed very well. The use of stanzas might make your piece a little stronger, but is is only a suggestion, as the form is entirely up to you.
Nice write. I hope to read more from you.
Good luck in the contest, and thank you for entering.
~Manic
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I really liked this poem! good luck in the contest
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i really like this part
Every Word You Spoke
Lies Sewn Into My Spine
it's a great poem. good luck in the contest
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