Morning sings with possibility's stirring song
rising to wash away the eve's doubts.
No eyes can see what isn't there,
but the heart can believe
in wish mirages that can come alive.
Bear a smile to greet the sun,
light will rise in the spirit,
till you pass on the warmth to another,
then they too shall feel the dawn.
A contest entry
- Short & Sweet and Really Upbeat {Edit} by HerbalGoat.
300 points, ended March 13, 2007, 24 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This is a beautiful, calm, poem you wrote. L3 and L4 were what captured me the most. "No eyes can see what isn't there, but the heart can believe"
Revision pointers:
- Your poem was not required to be ten lines long. I think your final word of "dawn" should be placed with the line about it, and then remove the comma between "the" and "dawn." -
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Thank you for the kind comment. I also took your advice and went back in edit the poem.
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I too like the early morning's dawn, moment of reflection, moment to inhale nature at it's best.
Really liked your little rhyme.
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Thank you so much for the kind comments.
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Warm and bright. While poetically this isn't really in my set, I could see what you were trying to do, bring a highlight to the reality that each new day is a gift.... and certainly that cannot be said enough. Best wishes in the contest.
Good luck in your future works.
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Thank you. I really appreciate your kind remarks.
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I am amazed....
and I feel so good to know that there really are good people...I see the pay it forward spirit in so many people on this site...
beautifully done...
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Thank you for the kind comment and reading my poem.
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So true this is. It only takes a moment of kindness to pass on that warm and make another feel loved. Beautifully said, my dear friend.
So loving and sweet.
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Thank you sweetness. It means so much.
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What poem did you write in my previous contest?
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It was the poem, Shifting Gears.
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Most wonderfully beautiful penning, my friend! Sigh...
Loved this!
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Thank you dear. So glad you enjoyed it.
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Such beautiful words,would melt the coldest of hearts, good luck in the contest
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Thank you dear. I can think of a few cold hearts I've known that nothing would melt though.
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Beautiful-
What a Beautiful verse You have penned which Lifts the Spirit to a whole new level
How can one not smile
after inhaling Your words~
Much energy You exude throughout!
The border adds that *extra* Touch~
Thank You for sharing Your Talent!
Best wishes to You in the contest
Many blessings too
and my Love
~ Desire~*~
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Ah, you always know how to say jus the right thing.
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