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Rot and Rust

I watch as you slowly drift away
My mind racing through the oceans of a past day

You fade from my eyes
You just go away like the unbearable lies

Everything fades to a shade of black
The once impenetrable castle around my heart
has started to crack

As the fortress crumbles to very fine dust
I start to choke on the cloud of rot and rust

It fills my lungs as you go yet again
If there was no such thing as pain, then

would there be a way I could still be alive?
Could there be a shoulder for every time I cry?

The rot and rust clouds around everything I used to know

Please take me away from this
Evil hazy cloud that smells like rotten piss

Please let me exist as I choke and scream
Even my own tears are starting to gleam

This empty cloud <---Chorus
Of rot and rust
These tears become my shroud
Of blackness and pain
This cloud of rot and rust
Will it ever go away?

Once again I have to be in pain
Watch my fingers disappear as I die in vain

This cloud of rot and rust won’t ever go away
I’m suffering as if there is no tomorrow or yesterday

The foundation of my soul
Has become brittle, and cold

There is no way you could ever know
The pain and suffering I took so you could continue to grow

I lost my soul to save your life
I did everything in my power to do what was right

Losing my mortality so you could still be here
But you will never know the pains and fears

That fills my head
The cloud chokes me, as I slowly become one of the Dead

The things I did for you, the poison I had to ingest
All the screams count for the rest

Of each time you walked away from my side

(chorus)

The blades of your enemies
Slice anything that moves and enter me
I take them so you could see
The lengths I took so you could stay free

I can’t believe that you can’t see just what I have done
How all the fame and glory I won

Doesn’t mean a damn thing
As the blades slice and sting
The body of your king

I died for you but you won’t ever know
The things I did, but it can’t show
Feelings in me that still continue to grow

I feel the infinite pain as the light
Dims out this horrible sight
The king that died in a never-ending fight
The light eventually turns into my very last night

My blood I have shed
You, the one I wished to have wed
Will go to bed

Never knowing these things I have done for you
Just so I could’ve heard once more, “I love you, too!”

(chorus)

Author notes

This was based on a past relationship and a dream I once had

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  • drkmisery1
    March 26, 2007

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    great write and i liked the song format the flow was also very good

    I lost my soul to save your life
    I did everything in my power to do what was right

    Losing my mortality so you could still be here
    But you will never know the pains and fears

    these were my favorite lines of this write... only problem is that i didnt see to much duality of man this was more under the category of sacrifice and marytrs... other than that this was a great write... well good luck in the contest and good luck in all of your future writes

  • samcuy
    February 22, 2007

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    The blades of your enemies
    Slice anything that moves and enter me
    I take them so you could see
    The lengths I took so you could stay free
    i like that part. cool poem. good luck in the contest.