I watch as you slowly drift away
My mind racing through the oceans of a past day
You fade from my eyes
You just go away like the unbearable lies
Everything fades to a shade of black
The once impenetrable castle around my heart
has started to crack
As the fortress crumbles to very fine dust
I start to choke on the cloud of rot and rust
It fills my lungs as you go yet again
If there was no such thing as pain, then
would there be a way I could still be alive?
Could there be a shoulder for every time I cry?
The rot and rust clouds around everything I used to know
Please take me away from this
Evil hazy cloud that smells like rotten piss
Please let me exist as I choke and scream
Even my own tears are starting to gleam
This empty cloud <---Chorus
Of rot and rust
These tears become my shroud
Of blackness and pain
This cloud of rot and rust
Will it ever go away?
Once again I have to be in pain
Watch my fingers disappear as I die in vain
This cloud of rot and rust won’t ever go away
I’m suffering as if there is no tomorrow or yesterday
The foundation of my soul
Has become brittle, and cold
There is no way you could ever know
The pain and suffering I took so you could continue to grow
I lost my soul to save your life
I did everything in my power to do what was right
Losing my mortality so you could still be here
But you will never know the pains and fears
That fills my head
The cloud chokes me, as I slowly become one of the Dead
The things I did for you, the poison I had to ingest
All the screams count for the rest
Of each time you walked away from my side
(chorus)
The blades of your enemies
Slice anything that moves and enter me
I take them so you could see
The lengths I took so you could stay free
I can’t believe that you can’t see just what I have done
How all the fame and glory I won
Doesn’t mean a damn thing
As the blades slice and sting
The body of your king
I died for you but you won’t ever know
The things I did, but it can’t show
Feelings in me that still continue to grow
I feel the infinite pain as the light
Dims out this horrible sight
The king that died in a never-ending fight
The light eventually turns into my very last night
My blood I have shed
You, the one I wished to have wed
Will go to bed
Never knowing these things I have done for you
Just so I could’ve heard once more, “I love you, too!”
(chorus)
Author notes
This was based on a past relationship and a dream I once had
A contest entry
- Amaze Me! by Shantalina.
550 points, ended February 27, 2007, 22 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Duality of mankind by drkmisery1.
1003 points, ended March 30, 2007, 21 entries
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Comments
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great write and i liked the song format the flow was also very good
I lost my soul to save your life
I did everything in my power to do what was right
Losing my mortality so you could still be here
But you will never know the pains and fears
these were my favorite lines of this write... only problem is that i didnt see to much duality of man this was more under the category of sacrifice and marytrs... other than that this was a great write... well good luck in the contest and good luck in all of your future writes
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The blades of your enemies
Slice anything that moves and enter me
I take them so you could see
The lengths I took so you could stay free
i like that part. cool poem. good luck in the contest.

