Terror
Voices
Running
Escaping
Light
Blinding
Then...
Silence
Darkness
Relief
Then...
Shuffling
Footsteps
Voices
With...
Fear
Terror
Dread
Waiting...
Hoping
Praying
Begging
Then...
Faces
Laughter
Grinning
With...
Insanity
Menace
Anticipation
Waiting...
Hoping
Praying
Begging
But...
Alas
Pain
Awaits
Burning...
Searing...
Horrifying...
This is my pain.
Author notes
This is not a poem from personal experience, but a poem expressing my sympathy for all those people who have to live with this every day.
A contest entry
- Something out of the ordinary... by lucy sky-diamond.
600 points, ended March 11, 2007, 27 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Loved this!
very nice! I liked this...the flow was quick and very easy on the eyes. keep up the great work. May your pain find sweet release in the words of this poem. peace always in all ways. -
I love this.
Insanity
Menace
Anticipation
Waiting...
Hoping
Praying
Begging
But...
Alas
Pain
Awaits
Burning...
Searing...
Horrifying...
This is my pain -
I really like this poem..It did kind of give me the willies for some reason..Like the waiting on something bad to happen...But it was a great piece..
Dusty -
I like the poem. It is very well-structured as lucy-sky-diamind mentioned. Pretty good. You've done agreat job with the poem. I love the last parts of the poem. An intense poem of great emotion. This is really cool. I like the way you express your feelings. Great job.Keep it up. Keep penning such beauties. Look forward to seeing more of this cool work.
Luv,
Candy
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i like how it is then... waiting... very cool. good luck in the contest.
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a very good poem, well used structure, and some good ideas and elements. thank you for your entry, and good luck
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i like this poem but i would only say that you have maybe used then a bit too much? this is only my opinion though and it still sounds great.
my favourite lines:
Then...
Faces
Laughter
Grinning
With...
Insanity
Menace
Anticipation
its really good and obviously well inspired. well done and good luck
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very abstract!! i like it
good job pookie!
and good luck in the contest
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