Distorted views of yesterday
Memories out of sync with reality
Emotions lying dormant in the
cold caverns of forgetting
Nails scratching my body
to bring feelings back
from the lack of embraces
Interacting with my mind
Reliving conversations that
kept me alive
Unable to cope with the coldness
of night nor the warmth of day
Longing for the lover that
gave me my light
I can no longer shine with
brilliance
I am a shadow of my former
self
In a list
A contest entry
- What Is Forgotten - few hour contest time limit by CarolDesjarlais.
525 points, ended February 22, 2007, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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beauty
You're always so eloquent in your style, the musing of times past was so palpalable in this piece... just so real and vivid. excellent again. I&V
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I admire how your writing is always so sensual, entwined in love and sex and pain and joy. You use your experiences, whether good or bad, to give your voice strength and purity. Thank you once again for sharing, and for leaving such a sweet comment on "You are..." I look forward to more of your work.
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Not too many uplifting pomes from you anymore. Too bad you’re such a good poet, the emotion grabs my soul and rips at it.
Love, Amera
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i understand and can relate to this one
i felt what you want your readers to feel
beautifully penned
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this is angsty and scratches the surface of soemthing way more than a simple longing.
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Sad but well written. (seems I say that a lot to people)
Nice job and hope the situation improves.
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awwwwww...makes me want to give ya a great big
...you are not forgotten, however you expressed yourself with eloquent longing and past remembrances in such a way that you captured your own essence..ok...am ramblin...Loved this..plain and simple..! Good job, Good luck! ~~Kindred~~
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Beautiful!
I really love the wording in this! Beautiful and says so much. The images are great. Good luck in your contest.
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You seem to shine quite brightly, actually. Even from this distance. Loved it.
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