He didn't want to play at first ~
not with girls.
He wasn't a sissy!
But then they opened Auntie Maud's
treasure chest in the attic.
Below the smell of must, and dust,
was a wonder of petticoats and frills,
glory days of old.
Yes. He could play the man
to such feminity.
A contest entry
- A deeper view by Lavender Butterfly.
375 points, ended February 23, 2007, 11 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - BATTLE OF THE GOLD SHORTS 1 by Swan song.
2000 points, ended October 18, 2008, 43 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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A wonderful story in this poem Very well done Thank you for entering
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I know I'm late for your hood-winking, but I still love your poetry and this is a great write. I loved everything about it really, picture down to the last punctuation. It's awesome how it can provoke feelings of innocence and be so loaded with a deeper meaning and emotion at the same time. Great great write.
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Congrats on the gold and what a creative take on the picture. So full of emotion. Awesome write.
You have just been Hood-Winked
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Superb, we had stepbrothers we used to dress up in dresses, it started to worry us when they looked better than we did, fabulous write here hun, well worthy of gold
Karen
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Great job on this poem. You deserved to take the gold.
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Ahh this was wonderful and brought back a few memories of my own times, when we would do the same and make my brothers play. a delight to read, and congratulations on your award.
Love and Light
Frozentearz -
GREAT!
Being an only child, this problem never arose for me.
Shenton
I like must and dust, my grandmother had such an attic.
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This is truly creative with such great imagery and wonderment. Thanks for sharing and good luck in my contest... x Love and light, Butterfly.
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Everyone has an "Auntie Maud". Her "treasure chest" is forever filled with life lessons, and articles to help us imitate those who came before. I love this! The sentiments are embracing. I can almost smell the "must, and dust". I knew he'd end up playing.
Excellent!
I wish you the best in the challenge.
Much Love ♥
Renee
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I like the thoughts and sentiments on this piece, and it fits the picture all too well. Aunti Maud's adds a personalization, and yet still gives a freedom for the reader to put in "Auntie Lil, or such" Nice feminine/masculine play for even kids.
the word play of must and dust adds a authors touch that is clearly you, as well as the petticoats and frills. You have done well, good job and good luck on this poem I so enjoyed in it's concise nature.
Jim
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Auntie Maud's treaure chest has lots of ol' time goodies in it...
I like this one, shows your ability to see things from the little boy's point of view. Shows your spelendor of mind, a talented mind!
Jeffro -
I agree with El Pescador, I love your interpretation ... what you got from this picture is so much different than anything I thought of. This is the first poem I've read by you that wasn't humour or rhyming and I thoroughly enjoyed it.
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Well done, Lou. I looked at this, thought "what a beautiful picture" and my mind went blank. I like your interpretation, it's clever.
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Excellent- I like this a lot. Very clever.
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