A long time ago
I lived in the shadows
I hid under rocks
Because the rain scared me
I was small and frail
Living in the past
Never stepping forward
Floating in my pain
I didn't know what life was
But I did know my bubble
It kept me there
Crying the same tears
The days kept coming
So persistent and relentless
And striked me across my cheek asking,
Why do you waist all that I give you?
So I stood on my new feet
No longer crawling with my knees
Put my face in the rain
And danced it away
I grew ten feet tall
Taking twenty steps at a time
I ran through daisies in the sun
and swam in the pond
Then I knew what life was
A gift given to me
So now I walk swiftly
Never shedding those old tears
Author notes
My inspiration: "Waste not fresh tears over old griefs."
-Euripides
In a list
A contest entry
- An Inspiration of Quotes by perdisbeaute.
300 points, ended February 27, 2007, 9 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Staying in the Light by sahdana.
650 points, ended March 20, 2007, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This is really good. You are right. It does no good to dwell on things which we cannot change, things that are better left in the past. We should never forget them but we should not linger on them either. Great write.
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nice and soft and pure...
nice and soft and pure...sweetly authentic and very uplifting...thanx so much for entering and all the best to you...peace & blessings
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Beautiful Poem
CONGRATULATIONS on winning the Silver. Your poem was wonderful. Take care, Sandy
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This is wonderful to read. Write from the start by using the past tense the poem has an element od hope for the ending. Many people find themselves hiding in the shadows, drowned by the rain not able to dance in it. I think this poem is an inspiration for people to break free and sharing the knowledge that it is possible to do so, it certainly touched me maybe soon i'll be able to stand on new feet. Well done on a great poem xX
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Then I knew what life was
A gift given to me
So now I walk swiftly
Never shedding those old tears
Indeed it is the hope of the life coming through the words of this poem...This is a great picture of the muse dealing yourself with the concept of the life bringing the conflict of a person chasing this universl truth which is known as a gift unless it is proved and this has come out so beautifully...Indeed a great heartfelt and great work ...
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So I stood on my new feet
No longer crawling with my knees
Put my face in the rain
And danced it away
I grew ten feet tall
Taking twenty steps at a time
I ran through daisies in the sun
and swam in the pond
Then I knew what life was
A gift given to me
So now I walk swiftly
Never shedding those old tears
Truly Inspirational and Beautiful..Gives hope that you should not hide but to embrace life to it's fullest. Life is to short to hold back and hide...let yourself be free to learn and explore and live the great life that was intended
Great Job and Good Luck in the Contest!!!
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Hopeful
Great message in this, like faith renewed. The fourth stanza is my favorite. I like a poem with a happy ending.
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the message is put beautifully in this poem... begining with sadness, loneliness and despair... with vivid images in the words.... the story takes me along with you on your journey.. It takes a turn on the road for hope with inspirational wording like...
"So I stood on my new feet
No longer crawling with my knees".... and
"I grew ten feet tall
Taking twenty steps at a time"
a wonderful ending ending... well done!!
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This is deep, the first part of your poem really caught me cause i can relate so well to it. It really touched me and i love when a poem does that. It shows talent and emotion in it!!!
Thanks so much for entering, i really enjoyed this write! -
You took that quote and wrote with such a positive inspiration.
From the dark and painful into the light, a so very hopeful piece.
Good Luck in the contest~
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Very nice
I read it because of the title.Was just trying to write a poem I'm having trouble with. -
I LOVED THIS! This reminds me so much of what I went through last year...I also liked the quote in your author notes. I really liked this.
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