Twisted fragments of my mind
Left a scent, I couldn't find.
Sweat that sticks to needy skin,
Lust that grows from deep within.
Touch sends shivers down my spine,
One day, soon, we'll cross that line.
Confusion says I'd love to talk,
Follow me, let's take a walk.
Not what's really in my head
Smashed up thoughts I cannot mend
Tune it down and Crank it up
Stupid Jerk, you got me stuck.
In and out, can't take no more,
All a dream I've dreamt before.
Hold on me with no release,
Paper, pen, give me some peace.
Come in, sit, I'll lock the door,
Anger, guilt, falls to the floor.
Shakes return with every breath,
Blushing dooms my secret death.
Not what's really in my head,
Smashed up thoughts I cannot mend.
Tune it down and crank it up.
Stupid Jerks, just wanna fuck.
L.MacNevin
Author notes
This is about the temptation to take a male friendship farther and wanting it to last but in the end well you'll figure out what happened.
Written June 21st, 2003
A contest entry
- My Best Friend... My Love by ILegally Insane.
300 points, ended August 12, 2004, 8 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Wow you have a like perfect rhyme. And whoa seems like a hard situation to have been in. I loved this piece.
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perfect poem for guys who are jerks
this is very good. you are a talented writer and made this rhyme so well. -
I really like this!! I've been in that situation and you've captured it so well! The rhyme has such a quick pace, and the feeling you get reading it mirrors reality perfectly, kind of a controlled chaos..
Great write!
Val~ -
Whoa... this was awesome! and so true at times.
anyways, thanks for sharing.:)
+brandy+ good luck! -
Nicely done...I liked rhymes a lot...
Unexpected turns of plot...
Wow you a great job here...
You are great nice my dear...
Hold on me with no release,
Paper, pen, give me some peace
Yes...
sajonara...
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