I do have purpose
that stays near
a constant reminder
of my inner child
As my conscienceness
shines through to create
a new perspective
I break out of my cocoon
Only to discover that
I find places where
the sanctity of my being
does not flow as it should
My intuition is what
guides me though
there is no longer the
desire for the constant
upheaval of tragedy to strike
upon me
On my journey I have
discovered that there
are many hidden truths
So as my spirit ascends
I am inspired by my bravery...
If I am frightened
by the visibility that
standing proud does to me
then I shall stand even taller
No longer will I fear
the degradation that
once was my shadow
there is no home here
for the shame any longer
And I will no longer be
swayed by the fragments of defeat
When I become sorely tempted by
sheer exhaustion
And I think I can't
make it on my own
I will remember that
I am walking this
road of life for me...
Author notes
Clearly i am seizing the day these days
I've come to believe that i no longer hold the monopoly on pain and suffering. That's huge progress for me. I somehow believe that since i've started writing poetry it is exactly what i've needed to heal myself from my demons(if that makes any sense).Chrissy/
workinghrlyldy
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My Thoughts
I found this very honest and expressive, a personal poem that can be universal, and, I get the impression it's very very reflective of your personality. the poem of this poem reveals that it's important to you.... Yeah, maybe it's too much like my own style. ^.^ I did miss imagery, but I think you can justify not having any. I get the impression you set this poem down like rules, with a lot of sheer conviction. It was all spelled out very slowly, in even strokes. Another vote for Carpe Diem! Thanks for entering!
~Arovell
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Simply beautiful, Thank you for your entry. And best of luck to you.
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a wonderful example of the benefits of a quest of self-knowledge ... I love your expression "conscienceness", a very creative marriage between "conscience" and "consciousness" ... how lovely ... intuition is indeed a precious guide on our path, if we are willing to listen ... thank you for sharing your inner world with us, may courage always be on your side,
maa
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thanks for sharing
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this was beautiful to me...true poetry
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Walk on
Hello: I'm glad you added at author notes, fleshed it out some more for me. That is a major move for all of us to get out of the center whether it is pain or pleasure doesn't matter to the ego as long as it's ME. But moving out of that center allowed me to see the beauty of others and the glory of their lives. Keep going forward, I like that> Dave
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awesome man. I feel the same way. Writing is healing man. Ever since I started writing... somewhere around 11 years old.. my life seams to be a bit more.... I don't know... peaceful....? Well, I try not to question a good thing... anyways, great job, and good luck in the contest man.
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bravery that would make anyone proud! urafinalist!
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i would like to thank you for this entry into my contest and to wish you the best of luck in the judging viyanna rosemarie
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Wonderful!
This is such a wonderful and well written poem.
I love your energy and outlook on life.
It's great to read that nothing can get
you down. Life is filled with so much
suffering and disappointment but, it's
what you do with your life and the way
that you live it that makes all of the
difference. If only we all thought and
felt this way, the world would be a much
happier and wiser place to live in.
I love these lines:
"If I am frightened by the visibility
that standing proud does to me,
then I shall stand even taller.
No longer will I fear the degradation
that once was my shadow..
There is no home here for the shame
any longer.
And I will no longer be swayed by
the fragments of defeat.
When I become sorely tempted by
sheer exhaustion..
And I think I can't make it on my own.
I will remember that I am walking this
road of life for me."
Thank you very much for your entry in
my contest. I appreciate it and wish
you the best of luck with it here!
Jeremy0826
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Creatively refreshing!
This is a great inspirational work of art that simply speaks for itself with literary thought of unmesaurable impact that the reader has no choice but to embrace the beauty of the words as well as it'S flow.
-Keep the ink flowing!
-Good luck in the contest!!
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Inspiring words, intuition (inner teaching) is something that has been relegated to our deepest recess ever since The Inquisition. I am glad to see it gaining greater importance in the World again.
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This is a good poem. Good thoughts, thank you for this entry!
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Your thoughts behind your writting are powerful, and easily connected too. Your words flow perfectly and your words choice is great, which leads to great discription as well. Excellent job with this peice, I really like it a lot. Thank-you so much for taking the time to write this and enter it in my contest. I wish you well when I judge.
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Yes
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Yes!
very well written I like the flow and wording the thoughts are uplifting and strong a bit confusing but all together well done! Thank you for entering and I wish you the best of luck!
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Username in author's notes please -
I agree with the spacing, format, etc. The piece is well meaning but is rather simple is words. Not quite what I am looking for; but thank you.
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First, let me thank you for entering my contest.
Second:
The flow and imagery was very well done. Creative perspective and conveyance. Good use of language.
Suggestion: Insert spaces, so as not to OVERHELM the reader.
Um, a bit off topic, too....unless you care to explain it by IM?
Well done
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nice penning!! I love the flow of the lines very much..
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this is kinda hopeful in a sad way...
but what i mean is the last lines expecially-when i think i cant go on anymore from exaustion i remember that im walking the road of life for me... i dont know but those lines just amaze me... i like them alot. and welcome to "Candy Coated Pain" x]
*Abused *
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Wow. thats alot of other contests this poem has been put it. None the less it's a good poem. Standing up for what a person believes in. Themselves. What a nice sentiment.
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good write... good luck in the contest!!! -
And I think I can't make it on my own,
I will remember that I am walking this
road of life for me.
This part is strong for me...It reminds me that we are living our lives for ourselves and no one else. Thanks for entering and good luck!
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Boy this one has really made it's way around the site! Another fine entry to this contest. Thanks for sharing and best wishes,
Frogz~ -
Thank you for sharing in our contest
Frozentearz -
*nods and pouts lip in understanding* ...That's my reaction. This is great. It is our life. It felt as if I was on a road as I read this...wonderful imagery.
I think that's the only time I've given a poetic term in the replies to my contestants.
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