To know the truth is one thing
Regarding it as absolute is something else
Unless you believe in truth’s ring
To know the truth is one thing
Hear my words and delve into them deeply
I hope you understand
Sometimes we have to waiver our stand
Young ones have little problem with this
Only we adults get stuck in everything that is amiss
Unless you believe in truth’s ring
Regarding it as absolute is something else
Only we adults get stuck in everything that is amiss
We make things so difficult instead of just accepting
Never think you have all the answers due to age
I hope you understand
Mindless acceptance is a trait of the young
I hope you understand
Never think you have all the answers due to age
I hope you understand
Giving into doubt will never get you to the truth
Alone in disbelief will make you very unhappy
To know the truth is one thing
I hope you understand
Only we adults get stuck in everything that is amiss
Never think you have all the answers due to age
A contest entry
- The Contest Which Must Not Be Named by Orual.
700 points, ended February 22, 2007, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Well, this is certainly different than anything I've read so far. Brave of you to choose a topic like this; most entries are romance centered. It gets rather dull after a while. You adhered to the style perfectly, and your last stanza was very strong. It's hard to use a word that has four of one letter, I know.
The one thing I didn't really like about this was the rhythm. In your first stanza, for instance, the syllable count is 7,12,8,7, 10. That is quite a bit of variance and made the poem choppy. Other than that, excellent work. Thank you very much for entering.
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