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A tiny soiree

Blooming, like a beauty of a rose, in dusk's display.
I watch, as these beings gathered in a tiny soiree.


A princess smiled, at me, with a serene face,

as they met, in this wonderland of pure grace.
together, their essence, rises to embrace new growth
they give birth to a new season, and take their oath.


Behold! The fairies magic, of this spring night.
Weaving life, within the beams, of the moon light.


Dressed in petals, full of love and golden sun,
they breathe love into dreams, one by one.

Beneath the stars, beyond the midnight hour,

a fairy rests peacefully, in the lap, of a flower,

to awake, with a greeting for the rising dawn,
as the sunshine, shall bring forth, daily brawn.
Playing music, softly, swaying in the breeze,
keepers of the song, of the flowers and trees.


As the sun ends his daily tour, of creation,
the moon shines, upon the fairies congregation.


Blooming, like a beauty of a rose, in dusk's display,
Springtime's beauty, as they gather in a tiny soiree,
casting love upon nature, with magical wings in flight.

Dreams and wishes, in a beam of the moon light.

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  • Lorien
    February 18, 2008
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    Wonderful i like it =


  • Nereida Nightshade
    July 31, 2007

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    Wow so beautiful so mystical just enchanting. The words take me away on a flight of fancy! Well done thanks for entering!


  • Puppydog gold member
    July 28, 2007
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    LOVELY!!

    Such a mystical place you have created here.


  • shutter-bug
    July 16, 2007

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    very nice write. lots of imagery which is good, and great rhythm and rhyme. thank you for entering!!

  • JM Kenyon silver member
    May 5, 2007
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    This struck me as a very soft and magical write, sweet, gentle and and all around whimsically wonderful. You have a nice mixture of rhymes, some commons and some unusual, I like that blend.

    Nicely written. s and best wishes always... ~Genie~

    PS. Due to high volume of entries, I'll be using a scoring system to judge after the contest closes.


  • Autodidact
    April 15, 2007

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    Oh this is like so many of your work, "amazing" I love the rhymes and you unique with your story telling I love these lines
    A princess smiled, at me, with a serene face,
    as they met, in this wonderland of pure grace.
    keep up the good wor


  • Emerald Lass
    April 6, 2007

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    Oh, enchantment and beauty!

    You have just the right touches in this darling poem to make the reader feel she has gone to fairyland! A really fine poem, dear poet!


  • Stonecosta
    April 4, 2007

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    That is SOO pretty!
    It's really refreshing, just having a beautiful scene painted in my mind. The fantasy element transports the reader into a place that's really nice to be. It made me feel like taking a step outside and getting a good whiff of fresh Spring air!
    Too bad it's freezing outside, 8:29 at night, and not a fairy to be found for miles...
    My only suggestions is to work on how the rhymes fit together, how at some points the rhyming seemed a little forced, most notable with the "midnight hour" and "daily brawn." They just seemed like you had the accompanying word in mind first, THEN figured out what word would fit with it, then patched the rhyme together. This isn't like, really really distracting, just a tad awkward.
    Still though, excellent write, and keep up the good work!


  • BloodCrusted
    March 31, 2007

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    I love fantasy. And this was a nice addition.
    I can feel the magic, just by reading this. It was very nicely done.

    Thank you for the entry!
    -System of Cyanide


  • Pollyanna
    March 27, 2007

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    A Serendipitously Sublime

    to awake, with a greeting for the rising dawn,-I like the vision I get of that
    as the sunshine, shall bring forth, daily brawn.-bring it on
    Playing music, softly, swaying in the breeze,-A band of fairies..I know they play live for you
    keepers of the song, of the flowers and trees.-And you make them do your gardening...geez Fairy..hehe...very beautiful Krissi..I truly apologize for not commenting earlier, I tried to read you poems when I had the fever, but I knew my mind was not reaping all you had to sow, so I waited til the fever broke...I'm broke..hehe...wonderful work Fairy....Polly Likey


  • travis34dietC
    March 22, 2007
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    beautiful..

    i could picture this perfectly...nice job!!


  • aGent Lemon
    March 20, 2007

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    Thank you very much for entering this contest. I may add much more of a comment later on since there are so many other submissions.


    You may want to keep in mind that I will try to open more of the same contests one after another if I can earn enough feedback to do so which I must say would be truly appreciated. Altogether, I hope this will also give everybody a glimpse at one of you're favorite accomplishments which hopefully in turn inspire them to look at what else you've got.


  • Gypsys Soul
    March 4, 2007
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    beautiful

    ohh i love this it brings such wonderful images to mind really great


  • Zombie-x
    February 25, 2007

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    Blooming, like a beauty of a rose, in dusk's display.
    I watch, as these beings gathered in a tiny soiree.


    A princess smiled, at me, with a serene face,

    as they met, in this wonderland of pure grace.
    together, their essence, rises to embrace the earth,
    to nature and the universe, their power, does give birth.


    Behold! The fairies magic, of this moon-lit night.
    Of weaving life, within the beams, of a starry light.

    best part!
    wayy awesome imagery hun.
    best of luck in your contest!


  • Heavenly Angel silver member
    February 25, 2007

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    Beautifully written! Your wording and the images you create in the mind....just wonderful
    Wish you all the best in the contest!


  • panegyric ink
    February 25, 2007

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    I agree, BRILLIANT!!!! I loved your last stanza the very most with this one!!! i love the way the third stanza opens up the fourth as well!!! Overall, I have to say, this could definitely be published!!!!


  • riccadeana
    February 24, 2007

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    Once again another brilliant piece...I don't get tired of reading your writes because they keep me wanting more!!!!

    Dressed in petals, full of love and golden sun,
    they breathe love into dreams, one by one.

    Beneath the stars, beyond the midnight hour,

    a fairy rests peacefully, in the lap, of a flower,

    to awake, with a greeting for the rising dawn,
    as the sunshine, shall bring forth, daily brawn.
    Playing music, softly, swaying in the breeze,
    keepers of the song, of the flowers and trees.

    BRILLIANT *rose


  • Moonlit-Reveries
    February 24, 2007

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    Your description was fantastic! I can see every part of this delicate scene so clearly. Your tone was vividly delicate. And the form and repetition was very effective.

    I especially loved this part:

    Dressed in petals, full of love and golden sun,
    they breathe love into dreams, one by one.

    Beneath the stars, beyond the midnight hour,

    a fairy rests peacefully, in the lap, of a flower,

    to awake, with a greeting for the rising dawn,
    as the sunshine, shall bring forth, daily brawn.
    Playing music, softly, swaying in the breeze,
    keepers of the song, of the flowers and trees.


  • Amythest Moonjade
    February 23, 2007

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    Merry meet,

    I don't usually care for poetry on fairies, but this is really beautiful. You have some wonderful lines penned:

    Playing music, softly, swaying in the breeze,
    keepers of the song, of the flowers and trees.

    I love this. It reminds me of some of the Irish myths on the Tuatha De Dannon. Wonderful work.

    Amythest


  • NooNiThEWitcH
    February 23, 2007

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    Beautiful!

    Well, I can perfectly see!
    Wonderful poem! I mean seriously, I have never seen a better fairy poem! This was very magical and very nicely written.

    I am out of applauds but I cannot stop applauding, so I will keep the rest of yor work for another day

    Keep on writing, and good luck in the contest.
    Nooni


  • grrlshadow
    February 23, 2007

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    hehe wow! i love fairies and in your words i can see them so clearly and beautifully, making their mischief, dancing in the moonlight, reclining on flowers...dazzlingly done ... may i add you to my favorites?


  • Myjoy gold member
    February 22, 2007
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    Very visual. The story it self was wonderful. Well said. Well done.


  • Anthony-
    February 22, 2007

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    I liked the simile to open the piece - it really put this piece into perspective for me and it's progression was nicely tied together in the concluding stanza. Thank you very much. This is a much brighter and inviting piece than I could find myself writing currently. All the best to you. It is brilliant to find another Melburnian on here. I am in the northern suburbs sort of past Preston. Anthony.


  • cactus thorn
    February 21, 2007

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    What a delightful poem. I enjoyed the imagery. You've used a great imagination.


    Although I completely enjoyed the entire poem, this just keeps running through my mind

    "Dressed in petals, full of love and golden sun,
    they breath love into dreams, one by one."

    (although I think it should be breathe)

    I just love the image from those 2 lines.

    Great job.


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