Now I lay me down to sleep,
My eyes will close as I count my sheep,
And the last thoughts of the day enter my brain.
If I were to die tonight,
I would put up no fight.
If I went to heaven,
As I step up to the pearly gates,
I'll look down upon the world that He creates.
I'll look back and smile,
Because I'm not in hell anymore.
I'll smile because I know you'll be inside waiting for me,
And I know you'll be there for my own eyes to see.
If I died and went to heaven, I could see you at last,
We could start over and re-write a new past.
A past that has me with you,
A past that never could come true,
On this earthly hell.
When I get to the gates, to St. Peter I will tell,
That if it turns out you're not in there,
Then please send me to hell.
Now I lay me down to sleep,
I drift away as I count the last sheep.
Please tell me what you think
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This is Fantastic.
Jes, you did a wonderful job on this. Best lines-
If I died and went to heaven, I could see you at last,
We could start over and re-write a new past.
A past that has me with you,
A past that never could come true,
On this earthly hell.
and I love how you ended it.
Great job! Applause for sure
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Love it.
OMG........this is so deep, emotional I just loved it. I'm sorry I haven't read all your poem, I know I'm really far behind but I promise to read and comment on all the poems that I haven't already read by you. The words you used were very effective, I'm going to open a new contest on anything with pre-writes allowed, so feel free to enter this piece into my contest, I'd be really greatful if you did. Keep up the amazing work, take care and once again sorry for not commenting!
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