Darkness has returned once more
Enclosing my mind and my soul.
A life time of tears roll down my cheeks,
I shake, my breath becomes shallow,
I can't breathe,
I trap my anger inside me,
In a dark little corner
Deep inside me
It slowly grows.
Author notes
For the contest "Options - For those lovely easily pissed off people =]" Option 1.
A contest entry
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The feeling and thought in this were vivid as I read your poem. Thanks for entering the contest.
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ive felt this way before....
i know exacty how you feel
anger...that you cant control... its not a good feeling...
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I know this feeling too well....
thanks for entering!
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Aahh, I know how this is. haha. nice work! I really like it! best of luck in my contest! keep up your great worK!
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this was a great poem and one of the best i've seen thanks for sharing dianna
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Thank you and you are welcome!
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Well Done!
Great job in showing how people can hide their feelings within. We each have our own lil dark corner we go to when things get bad. Good luck.
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Wow, this is such a powerful poem. Your words hit an emotional cord.. The only thing that stands out in my mind is the repetition of the 'I'. If you chose to rethink the placement of this word, I am certain that you would be a contender.
Well done dear poet. Good luck in the contests.
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Hmm..
You have described depression well.
I love the lines :
I trap my anger inside me,
In a dark little corner
It made me think of someone that hides their depression, and trys to act fine. Maybe that's what you're trying to say. I dunno.
Well done!! This is a brilliant poem. =]
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Thank you. I found a couple of sentences that really are true for me especially. "One of the biggest problems is that we, the depressed, can be masters of disguise. People often saw the hilarious, goofy me on the outside, but inside I was dying."
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heck yeah! this is what I'm talkin' about! I freakin' LOVE this one! This is the first one I've read that even comes close to what I've been lookin' for!!! Nice job!
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lol, thank you very much for the comment! I am glad that this is close to what you've been looking for. Again thanks a lot!
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the duality of depression and anger is painted well here and empathised brilliantly with the feelings we go through as the chemicals that drive us turn to war, "a lifetime of tears rolls down my face" sets the distabled stacking thoughts and the focused fire is very zen, and so as it grows the direction it takes is what chooses our quality, as is the case yours is awesome thank you
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Thank you for the comment, like always they are appreciated!
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Avangar. this is the poem for me. I feel every inch of the pain that you are producing in this poem. I have been in this DARK CORNER. I absolutly love your write.
Lestat de lioncourt
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Thanks. I think that many people have felt this pain, this terror and anguish and have been in their own 'dark corner'. I used to frequently "visit" it because of a lot of problems in my life and mostly beacuse of my depression which I suffer from but I must say it's ben a while and far in between since I seem to have a hold on it...for now. Anyways thanks again!
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