Ma cherie amoure,
for you I bare
my secret heart
once filled with thorns
of pain and sorrow
and bitter anguish
ruled in silence
now wisps of violets
fragrant with love grow
One love
A contest entry
- a place to put some pre-loved poems. by DancingRed.
300 points, ended May 20, 2007, 21 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - SImple pic prompt quickie by StarLightResurrects.
540 points, ended March 9, 2008, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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good job on this write!
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so very sentimental and it is so B E A U tiful. i love the flow of your words and the imagery. thank you for entering this contest and good luck
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lovely....
this too i know..this feeling of a heart filled with thorns of pain and sorrow.....i really like that line, it speaks to me. you are very talented.
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Short (to state the obvious), but amazingly beautiful. Your words are filled with love and joy and honesty. Thanks so much for entering.
DancingRed.
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WOW!
Breathtakingly beautiful, I love it!!
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This flows like a rushing waterfall and spills into the heart. Cupids arrow does not have the aim this poem has. Excellent!
Mom
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nice maybe a vocabulary word to hush
up the cliche lips that say can be better"
this was excellnt how the metaphors lashed
my mind with the hoplessness that wil lbe contained in my next black ink
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an outstanding write. Love can soften any heart...as long as it is true love. Very nice write here. I wish you the best in the contest. Great work.
Sam
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I have to apologize first, you must have been writing this after I closed it - so I will still comment accordingly.
This is quite strong. Your words are succinct but it is like a punch to the belly, really well done. -
Awesome
I think that this poem was great ^_^ I liked the ending.
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