The raven sings
of wicked things
of killer claws and blackened wings
but I know where the raven cries
because the light inside his eyes
reflected me
reflected me
reflected bluebird blue-filled skies
where secrets graze in compromise
so many things
the raven sings
he sings, he sings, he sings, he lies.
In a list
Please tell me what you think
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wow
This is brilliant. I'm in love with your writing. Well done!
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love the imagery of a raven crying,
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Bravo
Brilliantly conceived and sorcerously executed! A terrific poem, wonderful, superb! I loved it! bravo... bravo... bravo...
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I really liked this. You took a simple idea and made it your own very well.
but I know where the raven cries
because the light inside his eyes
reflected me
I enjoyed that part the most. Overall, the poem is very strong and the flow is perfect. -
Very amazing... Keep it up. Stacey
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Well written!
nice...!! loved the entire concept of your write... very interesting... Loved the last line the most!! the perfect ending to a well written poem!!
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lyrical and metaphor filled
small poem..where secrets graze in compromise... and lies fill the skies... very nicely done..very artisitic
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Very good. I especially like the line- "where secrets graze in compromise." Very nice. I like the feeling you're trying to get across her. Keep it up.
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Had to check it out.
Don't usually leave comments with this account, but I was doing some maintenace stuff and I saw this and I had to check it out.
I think I may have to read this a few more times to get the flow to sound right in my head, but even without that, it was very enjoyable.
Too bad you didn't pen it for the contest... would have made a nice companion work.
Best wishes,
Raven Contest Staff
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man has no control over ravens. thats why he sings lies. now think of the dogs of god......
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I am not a fan of rhyming. There are a very few poets around here (Who rhyme) are my favorites.
A-bear is one of them. Anyway, coming back to your piece, think you have a strong messege to pass to the readers. This reflects self-contradiction- that we all possess. Keep penning!
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pqwerful
Love it,where secrets graze in compromise so many things the raven sings. That is one thing for sure is the raven sings,and he lies!!!!! SALUTE!!!!! -
Je l'aime
Ooh, the return of the sapphire soul.
I like the use of a common, or typical, subject with the usual Greg twist. Great job with the ryhme scheme.
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beautiful!
I love rhyming poetry...it can be a chore at times to keep it fresh and flowing. You have done both here with your poem. I liked the border as well. thanks for sharing. peace to you always. -
lovely!
I saw this poem on the featured list and just had to read it! im a bit obsessed with ravens you see, this is a wonderful write! I very much like how you compaired the raven to yourself! bravo bravo!
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Life Like
Amazing I felt like there was a raven right behind me its awesome. Excellent writting seriously. The last line he sings, he lies its just so true well don't ever stop writting cause this rocks
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Wow...this is a great write. I love the use of imagery and the playing on the stereotype of the raven as a viscious killer. Keep writing!
CR
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Wonderful!!!
Such power in your words.. Your talent just blows me away.. I love the background and the poem it is just terrific! Hope to read more of your great writes!
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