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Sweat Beads

 

 

 



It's summer, it's musk,
it's the way your hand lies
like wounded soldiers
3 inches above my knee-
how when you heave up
to grab a couple cold drinks
for us to fast chug
in defiance of the heat
there remains an image
that beads down between my thighs.

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

original... pfft. metaphors... pfft. You're lucky I don't center this puppy.

I tried to insert crimson... but it wasn't working for me.

A contest entry

mmmm... sweaty.

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  • FindingFate
    February 22, 2007
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    Love ya


  • -ButterflyCuts-
    February 22, 2007

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    You're so naughty

    tut tut.


    I really like this.. again, it's realy dirtypretty. I think I've come to the conclusion I like dirty poetry (not sexual dirty, just mucky)

    argh.. you know what i mean

    -sigh- I go to bed and everyone enters brilliant poems..


  • Danna Hobart
    February 22, 2007
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    Whoa, um, quite an image you left in that last line.

  • Nicole Hanna
    February 21, 2007
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    Hey, if you could use the word crimson and make it work, I'd give ya the gold. lol. BUT, you can't go back and edit now mwahhahaha. I think I'll have a "crimson" contest now.

    Oh yeah, gr8 pome man! Keep pennin. This was, just, wow, like so cool.

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