Red turns into deep dark black,
the sky turns from perfect blue,
I let my emotions flow deep within her,
i know that i will never go back.
Remain in your seat where you will be abused,
turning your life into mine as you did to me,
letting you know how forever feels,
all the words that have been misuse.
Giving you a red rose meaning love to me,
lets see how black it will turn,
death upon you will come with an horrific sight,
you will die and it will be a pleasure to see.
I have chosen to take your life,
nothing else could ever go wrong,
our lives both gone to hell,
against each other with all lies and strife.
The rose you gave me faded,
it faded from red to black,
knowing i will die also,
who cares this is for what i waited.
A contest entry
- Sadistic Emotions by Never Fall in Love.
650 points, ended April 11, 2007, 76 entries
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Comments
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A really good write.
I'm not too familiar about the rhyming style you used, and perhaps there would have been more effect if i knew how to read it...
I liked the last stanza .. especially the first two lines of it
"The rose you gave me faded,
it faded from red to black,"
I can relate
Great Job
keep it up
NeveR [♥]
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My own
I usually rhyme the way that i feel like when i write a poem, even though the rhythm in this one is... A B C A for each different stanza... thanks so much for your comment, it couldn't have been done better by myself
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Nice.
Nice write. I could really sense your anger that you have toward this person. I especially liked the third stanza. I think that a lot of people will be able to relate to this very well.
Nice job, good luck in the contest. -
Deadly poem
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