When one
Turns to two
Turns to three
Feelings collide
Emotions Inside
Exploding
Imploding
The brain
When some
Turns to many
Turns to all
Depression returns
Your heart burns
Dying
Decaying
The brain
When all
Becomes a few
Becomes none
Loneliness reigns
Feelings insane
Crying
Dying
The brain
Author notes
I was actually impressed with the way this turned out. Comign from someone with a strong interest in psychology, I found this write very... thought provoking. You have to think in order to really understand it, maybe even reread it a few times.
A contest entry
- Quickie Best Prewrite 10 entries Only! by Child of an Angel.
425 points, ended May 5, 2007, 5 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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wow, this is deffinately second favorite... or first... or somewhere ... i loved it, main point!!
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Love the poem sock. Great detail on the cause and effects of life.
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Another interesting write, its good to see you're not locked into any pattern of writing. i sometimes write in very short lines as well, although recently i've found that my best work tends to come from longer lined work, where the words create the rhymth more than the layout. thanks for the read
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I like the depth in this - each time one reads it, they can get another meaning from it. I like your wording and the flow in this - both well done.
Congrats. on the trophy, too!
best wishes
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Nice job on making me think for the night. This flowed well and drifts down the page gracefully. Thanks for entering. I wish you the best of luck! Your word choice was amazing and it did justice to the hard work im sure you put into this piece. Keep the pen flowing!
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You're impressed? I'm astounded, this is a awesome poem!!! its beautiful
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hey i have one of those
.. ne wayz thats purty damn cool. nice
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This is very good. Simple, but speaks volumes.
I like the rhythm, it reads very quickly.
It reminds me of a brain teaser.
Very good poem.
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