Send me away,
I can't hear your voice
Love has sewn my mouth
Evenescing sanity -for,
Not a sound can be heard
Call out for a new voice
Exit stage left.
NEXT, we're done with you.
Silly girl, you lose.
In this world of silence
Little girl's voices mean not a thing
Every important person is too busy
No one has time for you
Can't you see?
Everyone is way too deaf
REALIZE the obvious.
Scary world, is it not?
Interesting how one comes to find
Lingering traces of sound
Encapsulated among the silence
Never would they admit
Centuries ago, they felt the same
Eons and years ago.
COUNT on the slim chances.
Strange as it is
I thought I heard you again
Like the wind whispering
Ears barely caught the words
"Never give up hope
Continue breathing
Ending your story isn't easy"
Author notes
((if you didn't figure it out already)) the main stanzas first word spells out silence. and the one liners leave room for interpretation when you put them together
i just got inspired with the contest so.. i ran with it
A contest entry
- The sound of silence by Moonlit-Reveries.
450 points, ended February 24, 2007, 36 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
be honest
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*standing ovation*
i haven't seen poetry like this, or as good as this since dr seus....lol...j/k it is fantastic, very superb, it has so much meaning and so much heart, i love it...(it means more to me than you could imagine)
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Thank you. I'm glad someone enjoys my poetry. Often I'll write something, look back on it and wonder why I wrote it (because I don't like it) But I write for the outlet.
I'm very glad you like my writing so much. It means a lot to me.
-x-
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hey this is very good better than anything i would ever be able to write well
later
~Ashley~
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In a world of silence, be brave enough to speak. In a world of rushing, dare to walk. And Becka, I hope you live by those last lines in the final stanza.
With much love,
Jes
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as a matter of fact, I do live by those lines. =D
I'm diggin what you said about speaking and walking. =)
With much more love
-x-Becka
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Very nice work here. I didn't even realize the form but it was very clever and obviously so natural.
I especially like this part but I don't feel the last line of this stanza is needed. It would be better with the 2nd to the last line:
Scary world, is it not?
Interesting how one comes to find
Lingering traces of sound
Encapsulated among the silence
Never would they admit
Centuries ago, they felt the same
Eons and years ago.
Anyway, nice job and thanks for entering. Best of luck. -
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well, thank you
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