His fingernail clippings
lay strewn across the coffee table -
A mosaic of Einstein
stares up at me
from the cracked surface
and I have to laugh
as he jumps to his feet,
blurry eyed -
apologizing for falling asleep
before having a chance to clean them up.
He doesn’t have to be a genius
to figure out why I stop him mid “sorry”
with a kiss and a smile.
Author notes
option 3
A contest entry
- OPTIONS FOR EVERYONE!!! by NooNiThEWitcH.
425 points, ended March 8, 2007, 28 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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and i quote
He doesn’t have to be a genius
but i bet he is
just what i needed to hear -
The stuff that makes people smile
The ending caught me by surprise, I didn't really know what I was getting into, but it profoundly all made sense at the end...creative stuff. -
I enjoyed the simplicity of the image, and the story going on kind of in the background. Keep up the great work. I will look forward to reading more.
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We know true love when we can get away with things like this without causing an arguement.... my hubby is like this, just makes me smile these days.... little memories.... beautiful job
Karen
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remnants of the ones we love, come in many bits and pieces,
I recently found the just a left shoe, from when my mother last visited, she had many pairs, this one was left,as well as a paperback book and a Moo-moo, a type of flowing, floor length, flowery gown in a closet in the guest room. She died in 1997, and they have been there all this time, I can't hug her and kiss her and return them with a laugh, that is the beauty of the clippings, what they were attached to is thankfully still attached to you.....best to you jen...Artis -
very touching
This was so sweet, lol our everyday price for our ones we love.. Thank you for sharing this..
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Awwww. This is so sweet. It's speaks of a love that accepts everything, and that's beautiful. The flow is great, and the description is vivid...I could imagine it happening.
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A beautiful poem that made me smile so much.
Best of luck in the contest.
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Very nice. I like the originality of this and the step into real life. This left me smiling and happy I took the time to read your work. Blessings. Debby
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fantastic write!! It's been said before me, but you've managed to write a love piece without all the cliche and fluff. Very original. I really enjoyed this piece.
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Cool
Not bad. The way that you put the Einstein reference in there along with contrasting by saying, "he doesn't have to be a genius" was impressive. I like the simplicity of it. It isn't flashy, ostentatious, or even kitchy. You did love poems a huge justice with this one. Well done.
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a very origional poem, i agree with catz, a love poem, but not overly romantic. a great write
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Very touching. Love is everywhere if you look for it and not try to squash it. I celebrated my 20th wedding anniversary yesterday and I am happiernow than I was then. So glad you found yours,
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This is very much a love poem, not a romantic kind of love poem, but the kind that says 'I love you' without having to be in a romantic situation. Many wives would scolf, nag and bitch if her husband did something as 'slobbish' as to leave his fingernail clippings laying about but you've taken this very same incident and made it into a poem of love and acceptance.
This says so much about the person you are
A wonderful write, Jen Good luck in the contest
love and
Dee
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How sweet. This is what love is really about. You took something that is definitely not cliche and definitely not romantic, and showed how full of love it can be. Marvelous, and good luck in the contest. --->pixxie<---
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That was cute, not what I had in mind when I put that option, but it is nice to see some cute creativity lol.
The ending is very sweet 
I liked it and enjoyed reading it. So, Thank you for entering it in my contest, and keep on writing,
Nooni
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