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Exposed Soul

Distorted reflections fall spontaneously from moist eye,

slowly each droplet evaporates on touching youth's skin

rivulets follow line of mouth and dimpled, quivering chin,

as memories turn the cog of life's uneven yoked wheel.

The past is not always of multiple years
even a short life has it's share of pain
a fist from an angry arm often aims true
leaving it's mark for tears to wash like salve.

A head covering stylish though it may be
hides a multitude of grevious bruised skin
pulled this way or that it cannot erase the pain
mirrored for all the world to see.

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  • luismcunha
    May 2, 2007
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    Thanks, i'm a portuguese
    luis


  • sheltered gold member
    February 28, 2007
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    You have a very unique style. Origional and refreshing.


    • wishintreeUK
      February 28, 2007
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      Thank you for reading my poem and especially for taking the time to leave your comments, I do appreciate that.

      ~Katie~


  • Touchof1der silver member
    February 21, 2007
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    WoW! I am not use to seeing this genre from you. You have created the image so well within my mind. You really draw the reader into the eyes of the image. Nicely done Katie. Good luck in the contest!
    ♥ Touchof1der


  • CarolDesjarlais silver member
    February 21, 2007
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    My my, another very dark write.....thank you for this..you developed your poem well.


  • Whoochi gold member
    February 21, 2007
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    explosive, emotions running through this...the eyes tell more than we know....good job, good luck!


    • wishintreeUK
      February 23, 2007
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      Thank you Whoochi for taking the time to read and comment on my poem, I do appreciate it

      ~Katie~

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