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kiss from a rose

I can feel your breath
your body against mine 
i dont want to wake
Good night my love
i'll see you in my dreams

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  • Lj-
    March 29, 2007
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    Very simple an sweet.


  • Rayn
    February 22, 2007

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    Hmm, simply elegant, but it conveys so much to the reader. Not a bad write, but not perfect either. Just practice writing, period. I hope to see more from you, and definetely very creative.


  • risewiththesmoke
    February 21, 2007
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    simple yet elegant... short but sweet... all that jazz

    really love the rhyme/rhythm

    seems like you could make this longer, like into a song... what you have could be the chorus, maybe... just a thought...


  • Samplette gold member
    February 21, 2007

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    A romantic and beautiful write. Very nicely done. It is wonderful to have that warm body next to us, we just need never take it for granted. Love it.
    Sam


  • She burns
    February 21, 2007

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    Awwwww just so beautiful and sweet,in such few words, the love, the passion and the sweetest of dreams....
    I love it so much, and I love that song too...

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