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Death of a Salesgirl

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Death of a Salesgirl

Murdered, slashed, cut down in her prime,
my muse is gone, I can’t even rhyme.
Succulent morsels came from my lips,
I used to write such beautiful scripts.

She was always there, my constant friend,
now she has gone, I can’t comprehend.
With a blank stare I sit at my desk,
Composing poems so bad and grotesque.

I never dreamed that I could loose,
until I lost my precious muse.
Please come back, my muse, my friend.
There’s so much left that must be penned.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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*crack

I bet Arthur Asher Miller is rolling over in his grave now.

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  • laughingstock
    March 5, 2007

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    Awesome.

    Very nicely done. I really like this poem a whole lot. I need your option though, please read my directions and put the option in the author's comment box.
    This was short and sweet and it expressed perfectly what needed to be expressed. WELL DONE. Thanks for entering my contest and good luck.


  • LadyLavender gold member
    February 24, 2007

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    Your Muse Is teaching right now

    Amera, your muse is not gone! Taking a break and teaching...SMILE! She's learning more too, when she returns she'll rock...Big time!

    LL


  • Myth Of Twilight
    February 22, 2007

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    felt compeld

    i just had to read somthing of yours a voce in my head telling me to find out a little more of the one i am talking to this poem has a since os sorrow i truly love im sorry if im am misplaceing myself and makeing you fell worse none the less GREAT WRITE!!!!!\ /


  • LaVieBohemme
    February 22, 2007
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    Great poem, Amera! your word usage is wonderful!
    jenn


  • Sacrificial Love
    February 21, 2007

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    WELL DANG....

    What'd you say to me???

    This is good...but poetry wise...it sucked...

    L
    O
    L

    Um...actually...I'm 'fraid to say...

    I liked this...

    (running from room before somebody throws something at me)

    I love you girlie...

    Have a drink and maybe your muse will come back after... or during... or maybe not at all...

    Some help I am eh?



    xoxo
    Heidi

    • Amera gold member
      February 21, 2007
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      Oh thank you so much... now i feel so much better, lol... may not come back at all huh? If she doesn't then I'm comming to live with you.


      • Sacrificial Love
        February 21, 2007
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        Careful...

        come to live with me...and you'll find a whole new inspiration to write...


  • And Hyetal
    February 21, 2007

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    Aww... I'm sure your muse'll come home!!! I'll tell you what... I'll send mine back to the ice cream shop to get yours. Great work!

    Cassie


    • Amera gold member
      February 21, 2007
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      Cassie, you’re so cool. No one but me knows what you’re talking about.


  • PerVirtuous
    February 21, 2007

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    I am amused. It is a great tribute to poets everywhere. Three bloodhound bunnies to help you find your muse.


    • Amera gold member
      February 21, 2007
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      lost my muse but my bf showed up.

  • Eulb kcalB
    February 21, 2007

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    you my dear are quite brilliant , very creative , different...in a class by yourself...that is just how it is...

    J


  • February 21, 2007

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    Beautifully Dark

    This poem is rich in darkness. I love it. So nice, loss of a muse is heart breaking. I can feel the pain.


  • mysticstorm gold member
    February 21, 2007

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    WOW! This is wonderful. I am so glad mind did not die, though she took a long vacation (yet to return) and the sub she left me has been writing dark and strange. She'd better get back soon or there may not be anything to save. I hope you find yours soon, though I think she is just hiding from you, for she sure did a great job with this one.
    Love


    • Amera gold member
      February 21, 2007
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      Thanks for the nice comment mistic.

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