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Magic Garden

In a magic garden
you wore a summer dress
I knew at that moment
I'd found my princess

As dreams gave way to early morn
and sunshine filtered through
There was something special born
I fell in love with you

A barefoot girl of innocense
who was lost in thought
Wishing she could find her prince
but knowing she can not

Forever I will wait for you
this is my legacy
Hoping that my dream comes true
and you'll belong to me

I will never forget that day
when more than flowers grew
This is when I gave away
my heart to only you

Author notes

Sorry this is prewrite'though I'm glad I now know who I wrote it for

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  • Deaths Prayer
    September 18

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    this was great i liked it very much. you told the story quite beautful. thank you for entering my contest. i love your choice of words and the images you use to tell loves story. thank you again for entering my contest i wish you well.good luck

  • piccola silver member
    March 7

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    nice rhyme and it's so romantic. Almost sounds like something I'd write. Thank you for entering the contest.


  • GotLilt
    March 6
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    nice rhyme! Line 9 has innocense misspelled
    innocense


  • LoveNeverDies.
    March 3

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    This is wow, I love your style of write,

    It flows flawlessly and is just overall a fantastic piece,

    Thankyou for entering LoveNeverDies,
    And I wish you all the best

    (:


  • Rebekah-Ann silver member
    February 13, 2008

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    ~~~ Thank you very much for entering this beautiful poem… ~~~
    Such a magic-filled piece telling the story from a different point of view.
    ~~~ Good luck in the contest and hope you enter again ~~~

    Becks


  • second-born
    September 6, 2007

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    oh this poem seemed so magical in its theme and its words...it also has a natural flow...I loved the first and last stanzas...very captivating indeed...


  • Aurielle
    August 30, 2007
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    "when more then flowers grew"

    More then what? there is no general number

    But i like this poem though something that is so different... sweet and beautiful yet classic


  • Aurielle
    August 29, 2007

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    The second line in the last stanza needs adjustment but i find this ws magical and sweet and sincere with flow and nice rhyming... its cute and settled...

  • Aurielle
    August 24, 2007
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    very good

    I really like this

    somethning about the flow hmmmmmm


  • JoyfulWriter
    February 21, 2007
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    Very beautiful poetry....bunches of luck in this contest...smiles, Terry


  • Sweetangelgrace
    February 21, 2007

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    This poem was amazing! I love the way you painted a picture with words, I love how the words flow together to create a wonderful feeling inside while reading...

    Your beautiful words like a sparkling mountain stream which flows into my heart.I could feel my heart melting as if MY PRINCE CHARMING had just wrote it for me. I melted, it made me weak

    This poem is a great piece of work!!!
    Good luck in my contest...


    ~~GRACE~~


    • bluecollarlove
      February 21, 2007
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      Grace my life

      Remember Grace when I write my book the front page is meant for you.The beutiful princess in a summer dress amongst the wild flowers.

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