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Tartarus

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In a dark and horrible surreal dimension
Where all nightmares are birthed,
Hope is nonexistent it is said
And foul vile creatures lurk.

In this place, tortured souls cringe
Remembering their sordid past,
And there can be no rest, but only pain,
The type that forever lasts.

To some this place is just a myth
Invented by ecumenical minds,
But I know it is real, without a doubt-
My spiritual eyes are not blind.

Throughout history we have heard the stories
Of the sinister netherworld below,
Where the incorrigibly sinful will likely one day:
Be relegated with great suffering woe.











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  • DramaQueen469 gold member
    March 7

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    Love the imagery, love the rhyme, love the rhythm. Generally, just love the piece. WELL DONE!!

    Maria


  • chilali
    November 13, 2008

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    I loved this MJ! Wow. This was just amazing! I loved the imagery and flow!

    Much love
    Ylova


  • Ryan79
    November 12, 2008

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    It was great from the first line to the last. It was so riviting and surreal. The picture really set the stage for it too. I like the way each stanza is a sentence. It seems to flow really well from stanza to stanza. Such a vivid picture and deep convictions.


  • Angelflower
    April 18, 2008

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    THE PICTURE SCARED ME!!
    I really liked this... you have such a way that brings the reads in .. I couldn't stop reading.. I really liked this line best though

    "But I know it is real, without a doubt-
    My spiritual eyes are not blind"

    Well done brother mine!!!

    Jetleena :


  • Mad Pastor Grovell
    September 17, 2007

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    Yeah! Yeah! Yeah! God moves in a mysterious way his punishments on mortals to bestow! A great poem about how GOD will slaughter sinners!


  • FAH faithandhope
    June 6, 2007

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    Well Done!

    I enjoyed this poem and the truth it tells. Great flow and good use of words. Many Blessings to you! FAH


  • Mel-the-Believer
    June 4, 2007

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    Very good. Very well written. Well done with this poem. I liked it. Thank you for entering. Good luck. God Bless!


  • ForgottenMemories
    April 3, 2007

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    wow amazing write. interesting topic to write about, but you have guts to do so. very well written and the rhyme was great. truly a dark write, and I loved it. thanks for entering and good luck xShad


  • Shiro Okami
    February 21, 2007

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    it's good. I was trying to decide whether or not the rhymes were rather forced. It is a thin line. But I will take them as though they were not; to be fair.


  • Heavens Child
    February 21, 2007

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    Wow, I think this poem is incredible. Not all believe in this realm and I think it's courageous to write and submit on this topic.

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