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ion

ion
me
etcetera
please

chomp
chat
whisper
breeze

morpheme
blessed
shackle
tease

sinless
assaulted
page

under
pointy
poet's
quill

eclipse
murder
rest

scurry
bone

tale

sum

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  • just mercedes gold member
    January 13

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    'piercing' instead of 'pointy' - hmmm.

    I like 'pointy' for the layers of meaning.

    But I'm a bit strange with word-associations.

    This is a fine poem.

    • thinking
      January 13
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      pointy it shall be not piercing is too male macho stab stab stab...bullshit


  • xXsarahstarXx
    February 22, 2007
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    i love this poem! maybe 'cuspate' instead of pointy? Just an idea because I know you were worrying about it. It sounds great as it is though. Well done and good luck in the contest!


  • lucy sky-diamond
    February 21, 2007
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    a very clever poem, i like how you have described writing through great imagery and metaphors. thank you very much for your entry, and good luck

    • thinking
      February 22, 2007
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      Thank you for those words. I am having trouble with "pointy" really feel it doesn't belong.

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