Sometimes I look at this world
thinking I'm just some ordinary girl,
a girl searching for answers
and always wanting more
And my footsteps linger behind me,
rarely ever fading away,
taking from me all hope,
while promising better days
Yet here I stand,
my heart torn in two,
but I am breaking away
and I'm stronger for you
The shadows of my past
there they'll always remain,
but my sun is still shining
taunting that rain
To some I'm nothing special,
to some I'm just a girl,
but soon they'll all see
that I can overcome this world
Through the darkness that follows
these clouds, they may stay,
but I'll stand tall on my hope
and I'll thrive on everyday
For it is those that I've lost
without whom I am learning to cope
and it's those who remain
who love and give me hope
So I will stay strong
though to some, I'm just a girl
and I'll prove to them my heart
as I take on this and more.
Author notes
Well, I lost my best friend January 6, 2007 and this just came to me right now. I lost another one of my best friends 4 years ago, so this has to do with that as well. Anyway, thank you for giving me the opporunity to write this!
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A contest entry
- Do You Deserve To Be In My Favorites? by Random Lily.
300 points, ended February 25, 2007, 13 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Amazing
This is quiet possible one of the best writes I have read on this site. I must say that you have a way with words and truly captured me within your poem and i felt your emotions. I like the way you let it be like what you do from here on is in memory of those you have lost;
For it is those that I've lost
without whom I am learning to cope
and it's those who remain
who love and give me hope -
I have known this feeling having lost my best friend on December 25 of 2006, it is something you never get over but we all have the ability to go on, whether we want to or not, I am sorry for the loss of both of your friends, you have captured wonderful feelings of love and emotion in your words and you can't really go wrong with writes that come from the heart, wonderful job, I wish you all the best in the future
Karen -
simPLE BEAuty well rhymed, abit contradictory at times yet made fine at the wonderful pride and overpowering that shadow that lingers and so as i wonder to the internal light of us all I thank YOU for A veRY NICe write
(OH and My condolences on losing your friend the partings of rhythmed souls are rough waves aye?...)
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Through the darkness that follows
these clouds, they may stay,
but I'll stand tall on my hope
and I'll thrive on everyday
....wow that stanza really stuck in my head! i loved this! great job!
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This is a wonderful poem. I really like what you did with it. It's very empowering, I think.
I can't imagine losing a best friend like that. The ones I've had have simply drifted off on their own paths in life. However, I know what you mean about leaving the past behind you. I'm learning to do that myself. It's encouraging to know that you can still have hope despite the circumstances.
Good luck in the contest. You've written a wonderful tribute, not only to your friend but also to your strength and will.
-Rae
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I really enjoyed this. Your eventual hope in this poem is very uplifting. I've written a poem with this title, actually, so I can certainly understand what you're talking about. Really sweet poem. I found it interesting how you have a steady rhyme pattern except for the first and last stanza. It actually worked quite nicely. Great job and good luck in the contest!
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I think I like this just about as well as anything recent of yours that I've read. It just flows nicely and has a very nice rhythm. Particularly like the fourth stanza. Good job grandaughter V.
Grampa Paul
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Am so sorry about your friends.I know everyone would like to get some answers from life but sometimes we don't. I have been in your shoes and I know how it feels, my friend hung herself 6 years ago and I have never gotten over it.
Your poem is brilliant,simple and yet you manage to show all the determination in short stanzas. It is a great piece,I love it! -
This is very good, although you mispelled "rarely". I like this one very much, especially, "And my footsteps linger behind me,". I really love that line. Well done!
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