I only gave you up
So that you would move on
But that willl never mean
That my love will be gone
I said goodbye to you
As I choked back the tears
Holding in the sorrow
Not telling you of my fears
You are all that I want
You're everything and more
But, they deserve a chance
Otherwise what am I doing it for
I just want to hold you
It's you that I miss
How am I being fair
If I can still feel your kiss
He says that he loves me
And they really do care
So I'm trying to stop
Seeing your face everywhere
My dreams are of you
And I'm afraid they always will be
Until I stop doing for everyone else
And think about me
Author notes
ummmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm.........yeah!
A contest entry
- inspiration by burning alive.
450 points, ended February 22, 2007, 19 entries
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Pretty story expressed in this poem! Its a little poor vocab and rhyme wise, and very simple easy cliche words, but the feeling and heart is undeniable!Thank you for entering and good luck in the contest!
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I liked how you expressed true genuine compassion for the other lover....thanks for entering my contest much love, Raneika
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Thanks!!!!
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wow!!!!
lol sorry about that. but this is an amazing poem. its so easy to relate too.
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Thank you!!!!
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clicked on this by accident in the feature box.
I didn't want to watse your feature points.
Not really to my taste, but good luck in the contest. -
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I understand that it's not to your liking. Thanks for being honest and thanks for not wasting my points!!!!
~DAWN~
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Love Goes On...
I found this all too real and easy to identify with. It really drove home the idea of making the right choices for ourselves. Life is a ripple effect of the results from these choices. It has taken me many years to realize this fact. thanks for sharing. peace to you always.
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Thank you!!!! I don't know if it was the right choice for me, but, it was for him!!!!
~DAWN~
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wow!
this struck a nerve lol.
i let a love one go a few years back. i thought i was doing what was best for him and not really for me. fortunately though, it worked out for us in the long run. we were back together after 3months (it was a very long, hard 3 months) but i am glad to say we have just celebrated our 6th anniversary and we have beautiful children
good luck in the contest.
keep on writing, i look forward to reading more of your work in the future.
cheers
Til
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Thank you!!!! And hopefully if it is meant to be, we will end up back together!!!!
~DAWN~
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Excellent!!
Wow!! This speaks such volume!! Wonderful write.. I have written of such things but yet to place them here.. for your talent puts me to shame!! Thank you for sharing such beautiful words..
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Thank you!!!!
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Very sad,am still trying to understand why you would give up a love as strong as this. You write well,with beautiful words and great emotion. Its amazing.I love it........
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Thanks for your comment!!!! As to why I gave him up, it's a long and sad story. Let's just say that our love came at a very bad time and if I could fix it all I would do it in a heart beat!!!!He will always be my greatest love and always own the majority of my heart!!!!
~DAWN~
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you've got an awesome poem here, and I hope you will keep on writing, because you can only get better. so keep it up, and good luck in the contest.
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Thanks!
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a passionate love story
well written verse the rhyme is good and the point comes across very well..all in all very nicely done
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Thank you!!!!
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