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We Are Just Hopeless Heartfelt Kids

Pain is white
It tastes like dirt and blood
It sounds like deep cries
And it reminds me of scars on hopeless kids
Pain makes me feel.

Just when I want to trust...
You or I find some way to break it,
to destroy it once again.
I want to grab you at your wrists pull you close
and scream.
How come you make me feel this way?
Do you do it on purpose?  
If so teach me great one.
For I am lost.
You make me feel so good it hurts,
as always,
I give in.

Pain is white
It tastes like dirt and blood
It sounds like deep cries
And it reminds me of scars on hopeless kids
Pain makes me feel.

Just when I want to love...
You or I find some way to corrupt it,
to infect our souls once again.
I wish to grab you at your shoulders, shake you
and cry.
How come we do this every time?
As a pair do we consciously do this?
We are both ever so disturbed,
giving in.

Pain is white
It tastes like dirt and blood
It sounds like deep cries
And it reminds me of scars on hopeless kids
Pain makes me feel.

Just when we are about to make it...
Our stubbornness gets to our heads,
to make decisions so quick.
I want to twine my fingers around your neck
dig into your skin and collapse to the floor.
After so many mistakes you think we would get something out of it?
What ever is a matter with us?
Gives in.

 

We are just hopeless heartfelt kids

with to many emotions to put down on paper.

We are deceiving and know our weaknesses

Bold to our cores,

weak at our hearts,

yet strong at our wills.

Author notes

it might not flow to well, but i like it... if that makes sense

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  • XHollowXEyesX
    May 18, 2008

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    I have to agree with the other comments. it flows very well, you just have to know how to read it. there is alot of passion and meaning behind what you have written. awesome.
    All the best
    ~Hollow~


  • Manda Kathryn Greeters member
    November 21, 2007

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    I think it flows very well ... Sounds almost lyrical.
    Strong write, very nicely done.

    Stay safe
    ~Amanda


  • Lady-Pegasus
    April 29, 2007
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    Interesting piece to be certain, nice flow to it and I can see this, with a touch of polishing, becoming a sad song, as it is almost lyrical in a hard sad way. Something hard though like rock! Best of luck in this and all of your endeavors. Hetohke'e


    • InTheDopeShow
      April 30, 2007
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      I was sort of going for it to be almost lyrical yet not, thank you.