Soft whisper pt 2
Soft Whisper in my ear
Telling me things I want to hear
Sweet serenade tingling down my spine
The feeling like there is no time
As you sketch away your imperfections
The corruption of beauty takes you
When you whisper in my ear
My reality seems so clear
A contest entry
- Sadistic Emotions by Never Fall in Love.
650 points, ended April 11, 2007, 76 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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I don't know what I feel about this
it brings so much thought in my head
maybe a bit too much
I don't know what you intended this to be about
but it looks like deception to me
as i said
many things can be interpreted
good luck in the contest
and keep it up
NeveR ♥ -
Nice!
Nice write. The imagery in this is fantastic.
I particularly liked the lines, "As you sketch away your imperfections. The corruption of beauty takes you." I think that this is something that most of us can relate to. In the sense that, we're always trying to reach "perfection", because inside we feel that these things that aren't viewed as beautiful or "perfect" make us less of a person, and we get caught up in it and obsess over it. When, in truth, perfection really doesn't exist.
This is a great write. So many thought-provoking ideas were presented here, even for a short piece.
Nice job, good luck in the contest. Thank you for entering.
~Manic
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