Horror
Pain
Ghasping
Fame
Blood
Screams
Torn
Dreams
Papers
Story
Theirs
Gorey
Different
Demented
Violent
Decreped
Knife
Hand
Cannot
Stand
Lying
Now
Forever
How
Darkness
Fire
Burning
Desire
Never
Awake
Memories
Take...
A contest entry
- Something out of the ordinary... by lucy sky-diamond.
600 points, ended March 11, 2007, 27 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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This is good - love the cliffhanger at the end of the poem. Just one thing, I think you mean 'gasping' not 'ghasping'.
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This is a good one!
Well done.
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i love it!
Blood
Screams
Torn
Dreams
my favorite part. great poem. good luck in the contest. -
an interesting poem, some very good elements, and great vocab use. however, it seems to ramble a bit in places, it seems to be telling a story, but in places is a bit unclear. but has a great amount amount of potential. thank you for your entry, and i wish you luck
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Ok, I'll explain it...
Horror
Pain
Ghasping
Fame
Blood
Screams
Torn
Dreams
First line...
Suicide. The Horror is in realizing what she is going to do. Pain when it is accomplished. Her final Ghasping breath. Fame? I'll get to that later. Torn dreams explains itself
Papers
Story
Theirs
Gorey
Different
Demented
Violent
Decreped
Line 2...
Papers=newspaper. Story, the article where her suicide was reported. Gorey, their details, its DIFFERENT from what happened, Demented, violent and decreped in her eyes
Knife
Hand
Cannot
Stand
Lying
Now
Forever
How
Line number 3...
This one is how they discribed her death. They found a knife in her hand, a note saying she couldnt stand her life anymore, and she is lying (as in lying down) Now and Forever. And she is asking How she made herelf do it.
Darkness
Fire
Burning
Desire
Never
Awake
Memories
Take...
Final Stanza...
A bit mre difficult to dicipher...
Darkness and Fire are the hell in which she had found herself in. The desire to escape. But she knows she will never awake from her nightmare. She is tired of remembering her life, so she begs for someone to take her memories...
A glance into my mind, if you will. I guess its something only I can unederstand...
Abbers
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