Tell
Me
Why
Give
Me
Reasons
Why
Please
Look
Me
In
The
Eye
For
The
Love
Of
God
Boy
Tell
why
Hold
Me
and
Let
Me
Know
Let
Me
Know
Why
You
Had
To
Go
Please
Tell
Me
It
Isn't
True
Tell
Me
Why
Boy
I
Loved
You!
A contest entry
- Something out of the ordinary... by lucy sky-diamond.
600 points, ended March 11, 2007, 27 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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I like the way you have a rhyming scheme going on here as well as a storyline. What happens next? I'm gripped!
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Wow, I really like this one. Interesting feel..full of emotion. Good job.
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interesting
Very full of emotion and meaning. something that has to be hared to do with the one word thing. haven't started on mine yet . I gotta think about it.
Good luck with the contest.
*Go with God*,
Valerie
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this is a very hard hitting and effective poem, and i enjoyed it a great deal. however, i think you have the poetential to make it even better, maybe start by getting rid of a few of the words like i,it,to and so on, making it a bit more abstract. but a truly great start
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