Thinking
Daily consort
That sustains inner me
Mounting upon ideas building prolong
Processes that define, makes me more daily
Flooded with factors, ideas that tilt
False paths empty barren truth
That led me to…
Thinking
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This poem concentrates on the nature of 'self' and how we grow and change. Hope you enjoy the poem...
Please tell me what you think
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Good piece. I like the fact that it starts and ends with 'thinking'. This was quite a deep poem with a good use of analysis. This was quite peaceful
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Pozo
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Different
I liked how it built-up with each line making a whole, I like the sea myself... Well Done
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this is a very...introspective-type poem. one thing that stood out as a little bit awkward was the line "makes me more daily". it isn't entirely clear what you are trying to say. are you saying that it makes you more...day to day...ordinary?? pedestrian?? it just reads a little strangly.
i like the ending...this has a philosophical air to it...subtle... nicely done. -
Brilliant
Wonderful this is really thought provoking. Great write. -
Excellent
Your writing stimulates the mind. I wanted to take two lines that stood out, stopped, read your poem again and decided, each word is part of the building block, nicely picked. I myself write alot about life, this is why I find this one well written.
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thanks...
What two lines do you mean? perhaps I can improve it and still keep the structure...
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love this....
This is something that I love to write ABOUT MYSELF. i APPRECIATE YOUR ART. THANK YOU FOR SHARING. PEACE TO YOU ALWAYs...in all ways...ooops for the caps...
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