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Good-Bye Tina

I loved you the day we met
I'll love you till I die
Though my heart doesn't know it yet
I gave it my last try

Now I have to leave you
You showed me the way
With all the things you didn't do
To make me want to stay

It's a shame our love can't grow
Now that we're apart
I will never get to show
From the bottom of my heart

What a wonderful person you are
And what you meant to me
But the game has gone too far
Now you'll never see

Good-Bye my darling
I know we both will miss
Thanks for never caring
I never got a kiss

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  • liquidmindforever gold member
    September 30

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    thank you so much for entering my contest:"Broken Hearts, Lost Dreams" with
    your poem "Goodbye-Tina."

    you show much sensitivity within your soul and compassionate understaning.

    nicely done.

    wishing you the best
    till then
    stay
    liquid


  • alwaysapartofme
    January 20

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    this a a wonderful peom. it is very full of emotions i know exactly how you feel. i really like it but i won't take any peoms that have already won some type of an award. if you would enter another poem though i would gladly take it.


  • e m i l y
    June 4, 2008

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    Ah I know what you mean.
    Relationships that mean so much
    but aren't going anywhere.

    This person must be an inspiration.


  • steal-my-scene
    May 15, 2008

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    It's a bitch isn't it? This subject matter I mean. Though you write about it so well that I'm kind of glad it happened. Heh... I mean that with all the kindness in the world. Good luck.


  • Wilted Rose Bush
    April 7, 2008

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    Lovely

    I can really relate to this
    It was full of emotion and had great power
    I loved the structure and the rhyming was fantastic too.

    Really well written.

    Well done, good luck and thanks for entering


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    December 21, 2007

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    So sad, I'm sorry you had to go through this... It's horrible when someone doesn't treat us right and when someone seems to push us away when we are in so much love with them *sob*.


  • Re-invention silver member
    September 8, 2007

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    very good. but you need to follow instructions, please do so, your poem is beautiful. thank you for entering and good luck in the contest!


  • LadyDementia gold member
    September 8, 2007
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    Good

    great rhyming, flows beautifully! Good luck.


  • forbidden-colour
    September 2, 2007
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    Very sad

    " I never got a kiss "

    Awe.
    Thank you for entering!
    <3

  • LipglossAndLetdown
    August 31, 2007

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    love this poem, especially the last section! flowed beautifully, there aren't enough rhyming poems out there! great work!


  • Abstract Image
    August 29, 2007
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    this poem was really strongly written and i loved the way it flowed...good luck


  • Musicqueen1012
    August 25, 2007

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    It's a good poem, Good length, and it RYHME. No one rhymes anymore and most of the poems got boring. Thank you for entry.

  • trace3grls
    August 21, 2007
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    love it good write


  • Marctheman
    August 15, 2007
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    nice, i love it, and let me say you deserve your bronze trophy
    great work


  • The Hardest Goodbye
    August 15, 2007

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    I love this poem so much. I can relate to it a lot. thanks for putting it in my contest. good luck.
    xo
    kandy


  • WhatsErName
    August 12, 2007

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    I was unable to find your name on the list, please join the group if you want to stay in the contest. You can find the group homepage at:

    http://allpoetry.com/group/members/Odd%20balances%20of%20Love%20and%20Hate

    ~Thanks~


  • Procrastination
    July 30, 2007

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    Nice poem, I sensed aggitation, love is a fickle friend, it's never around when you want it to be.
    Goodluck in the contest.
    Much love,
    Emily x


  • forbidden-colour
    July 29, 2007
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    Aw, sweety this is sad.

    Beaut though <3 [:

    Thank you for entering.x.
    x


  • Sweetangelgrace
    February 21, 2007

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    Your poem is very deep and heartfelt!
    I understand what you're saying, and it has to be hard. I like this poem it tells mostly about the truth and i loved it
    God bless you.

    ~~grace~~


  • denika
    February 20, 2007
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    such emotion in this poem not to mention that this part is.... i dont know how to explain it but its awesome:


    It's a shame our love can't grow
    Now that were apart
    I will never get to show
    From the bottom of my heart

    i like it and this is worth the reading...

    • bluecollarlove
      February 20, 2007
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      Now that we have met I must see who you are.And thank you for your words that I will go to bed with tonight.


  • JoyfulWriter
    February 20, 2007

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    So sad here, my friend! Your words are a reminder of how much love can be missed if it only touched someone a second. How well I know....smiles, Terry

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