here I come to this magic place
fortress nested in time and space
filled with magic and blessed with grace
A soft breeze caresses my face
firmament vast as the open skies
so many times we miss the guise
enchanted blessing, no one cries
the ancients called, they are so wise
a castle rising from the sea
the forces bowing down to me
enchantment is my life’s decree
they call my name, no one but she
now I ascend
nature will blend
do not pretend
there is no end
Author notes
screen name: Amera
Modified Monotetra
The monotetra is a new poetic form developed by Michael Walker. Each stanza contains four lines in monorhyme. Each line is in tetrameter (four metrical feet) for a total of eight syllables. What makes the monotetra so powerful as a poetic form, is that the last line contains two metrical feet, repeated. It can have as few as one or two stanzas, or as many as desired.
Art work by:Jim Warren
In a list
A contest entry
- Failed Forms by Starhiker.
1200 points, ended December 25, 2007, 10 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I love this form particularly and was taught to write it by Welsh Dragon, over a year ago.
I'm fond of the way this form rhymes and repeats and love what you have done with it. 
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i think i have been away from your work too long... this is quite beautiful, and some layers here too.. the form is expressive, monorhyme is difficult but your skills are evident and it works so very well...PK
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Thank you so much. I have been away from your work for too long as well. I plan to fix that.
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What a brilliant modification to one of my favorite forms you have entered here. I love the rhyming and the rhythm had it flowing like a soft breeze gently caressing my face. The imagery is absolutely beautiful and I was left with such a warm feeling. Thank you for entering and best wishes in the contest. I can tell who wrote this immediately, though I must ask you to follow the rule of adding your screen name to the author notes. I would be devastated if this had to be removed for that small reason. Kudos for this awesome write. Love you my friend and your work never disappoints me. AMAZING
Joyce
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Ok, done! Thanks so much for the comment and the bunnys
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That is a fabulous picture, and yes, it does remind me of the one used in my poem, The Dreamer - as you said. We definitely seem to have tapped the same emotions in each write - that shared reason for writing
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wow this is good poem i recognize you i thiknk you entered one of deranged killers contest all bloody you might have written the poem lilith it also had the same word firmament well this one is absolutely awesome i really love it the whole thing is just so awefilled good luck in my contest
OMG this is gonna be a hrad judging contest for me tooo many good poems now a -
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thank you
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I'm not that familiar with many different forms of poetry as I have a lot to learn but I know whether I like what I read or not and I thought this was a beautiful piece of work. Good luck in the contest.
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I am familiar with this style, and I never quite grasped it. Pleasantly written, showing desire with control taming the jolts of passion in your mind ready to fly. I only wish I could see thought develop before it turns to ink
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Calling Amera...
"The Calling" Taking poetry into the realm of pure living fantasy.
here I come to this magic place
fortress nested in time and space
filled with magic and blessed with grace
A soft breeze caresses my face
This IS the opening of the painting
The second stanza is your beautiful interpretation of the scene…
You words that the painting to new heights!
The third is the personalization of the poem. Simply Wonderful.
The last stanza maybe the shortest yet it is sublime.
Bravo, Princess… BRAVO!
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Beautiful...
the picture is incredible...
and your words that follow only serve to enhance the paradise depicted within.
As always...you are incredible...
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That picture has more than the castle rising... very nice write! Beautiful from beginning to end. I'm going to give you three bunnies so you can turn that island into a cash cow bunny farm! I have trained them, so they are prolific and will multiply geometrically beyond comprehension.
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