The pain I feel is way to real
Why must it be my life I conceal
I wish I could make it stop
So that I could soar to the top
Why do you insist on making me hurt
Why do you have to treat me like dirt
These are some questions I must ask
I feel like I must always wear a mask
I wish this pain I feel could end
But until that can happen I must pretend
This pain I'm feeling hurts me so bad
Because I have lost you im feeling sad
I wish in my heart that one day you'll come back
But as of now it is your love that I lack.
A contest entry
- Heart Broken by SensualWhispers.
425 points, ended March 6, 2007, 33 entries
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Comments
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Very good...
... Poem.
A few things I would like to point out. When you type about yourself using the letter 'i' it should always be capatilizedd.
Also, punctuation would be very good for your poem.
Other than that, your emotional intake on this poem is very well. I love the way you rhymed it. It flowed nicely enough.
thanks for entering the contest and the best of luck ot you. Kassie
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