Your smile lit up darkest days,
Your laughter filled the air, a singing sunlight;
reverberate through darkened moods,
‘til mirth gained its companions.
And then, if you looked extremly closely,
and kept very, very quiet,
see the friendship fairies dance,
twirl and spin in sunbeams of
sweet charisma
You were never alone;
everyone and everything was your friend;
you held nothing back
Nobody was too far away for you think about
too cold for you to hug
or too sad for you to brighten with a smile
You filled my mind,
You raised me up where rainbows fly,
and you were never too busy
just to be there.
And now you’re gone,
snatched away, like a seed in the wind,
gone to replant elsewhere.
You knew it was inevitable,
and that your light would soon burn out,
that your curtains of life,
would soon draw to a close.
But in the end
all you wanted to do,
was make it easier for those you would leave behind
to cope with your loss.
You were the beautiful and brave,
Fighting ‘til the end,
And proving to the world
That you would never give up.
Now, when I think of you,
I smile,
Like you did, so many times before,
And your memory is honoured
Inside forever you reside,
Your sweet memory,
steals into my thoughts
like a gentle fragrance,
You whisper secrets in my ear,
through the gentle breeze that
plays around the rooftops,
And when darkness has fallen,
you are the soft starlight
that soothes away my worries,
When I remember,
You are not gone; you live forever.
Author notes
for Lauren
died of cancer almost two years ago. mignht not be quite what you were looking for, just remove it if so
A contest entry
- Memories ( a contest ) by ramblin.
700 points, ended April 4, 2007, 12 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - PICTURE INSPIRATION by Darc Soul.
450 points, ended April 11, 2007, 14 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - 30th Contest by Tarja.
7300 points, ended October 15, 2007, 20 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - in loving memory by Improv Machinery.
420 points, ended March 1, 2008, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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i would not take if off even if i was told to..this is a good poem...thank you for little is read it
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Congrats on the fold and honorable mention... although this was not quite what I was expecting it was very well written. Thanks for entering.
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This is absolutely beautiful and such a wonderful tribute. It's a bit long and wordy for what we are looking for... but I could see you being published. You have a wonderful heart. Thank you for sharing.
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LOVELY!!!!
Ones memory stays with us after they are gone, their love of life, undying devotion to family and friends and their smile and laughter lovingly stay forever in our hearts.;f
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This is terribly heartbreaking. There's beauty in the imagery with this piece, which is a wonderful thing to see. What a beautiful tribute to a friend who has passed away; true caring is shown, because you're able to remember the bright times when she was alive rather than the sadness that her passing away had caused.
The metaphors were perfect in this piece. Every details stands out to the reader, and congratulations on the gold- this piece is definitely deserving.
I like how, in the beginning you talk about sunlight, then towards the end, you cite starlight. I think that, not only does that add an amazing quality to the piece, it shows that this poem was well thought out and constructed.
Great job.
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very good, indeed. it makesme want 2 cry!!!!
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This is written so sweetly, a gentle reminder of someone held close within your heart. It's a beautiful poem
Thank you for entering and good luck in the contest
ramblin -
This is again, a sweeter way, not about the sorrow of a memory when a person leaves, but about the joy of their memory, showing true mourning for the loss, cause more often than not when we're so sad someone leaves, it's not for them, but for our own personal loss. So when we can show that we're able to smile over the memories and not cry over death, that's a true friend.
Again, the poem was beautiful, i liked the fairies of friendship part ^^
GREAT job
diggin it majorly
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good write thanks for entering
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sweetie;;
this whole thing was great.
*copy/paste entire poem here*
loove♥♥
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sad but sweet... i like the ending a lot-its so heart felt and meaningful-a very lovely tribute poem x]
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I really enjoyed your poem it has an amazing feeling to it. You can tell you wrote this truely from your heart. yes, you are right, ur angel is not gone, she's always there because the sweet memories will remain.
Good luck in my contest!
~~GRACE~~
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Good writing
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a lovely dedication to a friend who has passed away, good luck in the contest, i little typo
too cold for you hug (did you mean... too cold to be hugged or too cold for your hug) 
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to cold for you hug
i believe you meant too*
(that doesnt take away from your piece tho)
VERY very nice write!
good job
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So beautiful.....I love it so much. It really is touching and a joy to read. Good luck in the contest.
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wow that was really touching. well done.
I especially like these lines:
Nobody was too far away for you think about
to cold for you hug
or too sad for you to furnish with a smile
You filled my mind,
You raised me up where rainbows fly,
and were never to busy
just to be there.
just one thing in verse two at the end I think it's meant to be "and were never too busy" not "and were never to busy".
A great write well done
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Very nice poem, I'm glad that you see that they will live on through people like you. Take care and keep up the good writes.
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