I think of you so often these days,
Dwell on how else things could have been.
How I wish I could of had
more fun with you.
That our daughters, (my sisters)
could have known you the way I did.
That they could remember the fun and beautiful you,
before that horrible disease arrived.
So frail you are these days,
like porcelain.
Please don't clean the bathroom...
Or we may end up at the hospital again.
I'm grateful you're still here,
defying all that the doctors said.
The morphine keeps you moving,
but it messes up your head.
Everyday is a blessing,
I know that with my heart.
Though I wish we could have gone on a holiday together,
Or could talk about my childhood memories.
Sometimes I cant help but cry,
Because I love you so.
The new you is all we've got now,
The old you had to go.
I know it's cold today Mother,
So don't you move too fast...
In my smile I hide,
How much your pain hurts my heart.
I want to mother you,
To protect you,
To save you.
Your Daughter xxx
Author notes
This was written for my mother. Who has severe osteoperosis and uses prescribed morphine everyday just to function like a normal person... I have wanted to write about her for a long time. I just wanted it to be worded in a way that not only expresses how I feel but that would also cause her no disrespect. I hope this piece does just that
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Comments
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wow.. thats so touching and it does indeed do just what you intended. im sorry your mothers going through that. if my mom was i would be devistated. actually i just hung out with my mom... so.. yea... but i understand somewhat how you feel seeing as my nanny is sick. wonderful write and thanks for entering. best wishes
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Beautiful tribute to your mother, does she read your poetry? you write some fine poems...my mother also suffered from osteoperosis...crippling and painful, she is lucky you are caring for her at home...leaf
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This is a very touching poem, thank you for entering it into my contest. I hope your mother gets better, I can relate to having someone you love feeling ill. Good luck in my contest.
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wow very touching sry about your and good luck in the contest
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A overwhelming write so deep
Wow first of all I say a prayer for your mom so God will have her in his graces always and for ever. You write is so heartfelt and sad. And it really touched my heart. I felt the love you have for your mother. She must be so proud to have an amazing daughter like you. I know your words make me proud to know such a loving person like you. My God always keep you in his graces always and forever (Lisa)
"Sometimes I cant help but cry,
Because I love you so.
The new you is all we've got now,
The old you had to go.
I want to mother you,
To protect you,
To save you.
Your Daughter xxx"
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this is so very sad, such a heartfelt expression of pure emotions and love... it is so well worded, so lovely, the layout is so suiting... it has left me with a lump in my throat and a build up of tears in my eyes.... beautifully written... I love the ending... well done!!
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Thankyou
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I love the way you expressed yourself, you can feel the emotion you poured into this as you wrote it, well done.
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A touching write for your mother and one can understand and see the love you have for her and the heartache you carry..Hope things get better for you..
take care.
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This is a beautifully expressed poem, you can feel the love you have for your mother and what she means to you, but also the heartache you feel for her. extremely emotional work.
shanelle
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What a truly loving poem from a wonderul daughter.
This is holds deep and loving thoughts for your dear mother. It just makes me want to cry along with you.
Bless your heart!
Your imagery really makes my heart sad.
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