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Annihilated

 





Callous thoughts

infect cerebral cortex;

blood lusting plague

feasting

on gangrene memories.

 

The stench of yesterday's

maggot-covered trash

resonates -

tainting nasal passages

with vile reminders

of un-recyclable hungers.

 

Insatiable thirst teased

with a promised oasis

of liquefied satisfaction;

soured by animosity,

boiled to perfection

in a cauldron of bitterness.

 

Personal evolution,

rewound

to eons passed;

a time of vicious play

in an amusement park

of damnable darkness.

 

Heated terrain trampled

with barbaric brutality

wielding double edged

kriss dagger to carve

right of passage

in decaying corpses slain.

 

Gray collar snaps

in black and white tug-o-war;

fine line erased,

light lays slaughtered

      - annihilated -

in victory

by shadowed self.




Author notes

Picture: Sister Christian

Artist: Melvin Bowling II

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  • Ktulu Blackwolfe silver member
    January 27, 2008

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    Sweet!

    I loved this, it has a dark emotion to it. Damn good. Thanks for the entry and good luck.

    **Ktulu Blackwolfe**


  • deadcolor dreams
    March 20, 2007

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    there was some cool images in here and clearly, your not at all afraid of poetic device! GREAT JOB I loved some of the alliterations you used.


  • requiempoet gold member
    February 26, 2007

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    Teehee probably a mixture of both. but it's ok I always have woman power to back up my bitchyness


  • requiempoet gold member
    February 26, 2007
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    Whoa!!!! So I'm glad I'm on your good side! This is very morbidly amazing and exciting! it reminds me of night time and Halloween!! ( that's a good thing ) and I like the picture! Sister Christian...that's a bit Ironic teehee.


  • Moons Lunar Angel
    February 24, 2007

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    OW MY GOODNESS this piece has left me in awe. I was hoping all the way through that the electricity wouldn't cut off because there is a thunderstorm, which I might add fitted to the piece quite well. I understood alot in this that I don't really want to repeat but it is absolutely brilliant work. I hope this is a piece in the healing process. LOve you so much mummy,
    Lil your lunar angel always.


  • lucy sky-diamond
    February 21, 2007

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    this is amazing! such great imagery and description, and a wonderfully gory start! a piece to be proud of


  • sheltered
    February 20, 2007
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    I really like the whole brutality of this and the alliteration was awesome.


  • poetryality silver member
    February 20, 2007

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    Oh my! Your first stanza is stark! It spills over with melancholy moods. I love the language usage! What a descriptive work of word-art. Although dar, and intensely morose, the poem is brilliantly written and delivers the message of sorrows succiently. Loved the alliteration placed in perfect areas. This poem leaps from the shadows and finds shards of light. It is revealing, and quite sad. I hope all is well for you my dear daughter and this entry was written this explicitly for the challenge. I am here if you need me and I LOVE YOU!

    The best in the challenge to you.


    Always ♥

    Mom


  • Heavenly Angel silver member
    February 20, 2007

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    Ouch! Wow! How intensely written! Seems as if you poured out everything deep and dark within you and wow, does that make for excellent poetry! All the best to you in this contest; this kicks butt


  • Blazing White Wolf
    February 20, 2007

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    this is a stinger My lioness the bitter taste on the tongue that was suckled and saviored ack! hard hitter with some very stark imagery in here well done

    love,
    Master


  • Tangled Angle
    February 20, 2007

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    Bel, this was fantastic.
    Probably my favorite from you ever that I've read.
    This had a lot in it.. yet so focused and connected.
    And packed with bitterness.
    Excellent.

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